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Wow this is just terrific! Rayco is so afraid to love me it breaks my heart! Oh man the angst is going to kill me lol Eagerly awaiting future chapters! I did find some minor spelling errors but I didn't bother to take note of them but I did take note of he/she errors and one description error which I'll list here. 

 When omar meets his father. When the king is talking about the sick. Omar lowers her gaze.

When searching for rayco in the library he's referred to as a redhaired man instead of purple.

When choosing who to visit, in Lucas room I ask if he needs omar to help with his headache "No." She says curtly.

When talking to Albert about his fight with Luca, "Well, now you know what to do when things calm down. And... I think she'll see your point, too."

When visiting Omar after drawing on the sleeping guard,  "Don't you think these armors look a little bland?" She asks with a half-smile that you know very well. Another one forms on your face.

Omar escaping from Daira,  Daira lets her pass, trying not to show the small smile she tries to suppress, although the slight curve that forms at the corner of her lips gives her away.

When talking to Daira about Omar, "Not good," you reply with a grimace. "She's come home to find everything turned upside down."

Here also : “She's told me something, but I'd like to hear the whole story."

And here: "Did she have any problems with anyone?"

Here too: "On one of her excursions, Omar met a girl from Pio Suave. A commoner. 

"the same day of the funeral she picked up a couple of things and ran away. 


Please fix when you can :D Your story is amazing and I've had several hours of non stop enjoyable reading. Thank you!!

Thank you so, so much for spotting all those errors! They're all already fixed :D I apologise for that, the editing method I was using made it all very confusing and a lot of these little things always went unnoticed to me. Hopefully, with the new editing plan I have, the mistakes with the ROs pronouns should be reduced massively from now on. Not so much the grammar and spelling mistakes, I'm afraid, since english isn't my mother tongue, but I hope it's not too bad :'D 

Oh, Rayco is very afraid to love MC, and even more terrified of being loved back! He needs time -and maybe a punch or two- before he's ready. Until then, he will try to keep MC at arm's length, quite unsuccessfully I have to add, he can't help but to show his affection in one way or another haha! 

And thank you so much for the comment! ❤️ I'm glad to know you're enjoying the story and I hope you will continue to do so! :D

Oh good! His type of romance is my absolute favorite! I'm glad to hear that he will be unsuccessful :D