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I like this sort of plotline, and I don't mind relatively graphic/extreme content in VNs, but there's a couple spots where there's some pretty heavy stuff that isn't treated by the writing with the gravity it deserves, specifically the discovery of the murder and the discovery of the amputated bodyparts. I also kind of lost any sympathy for the protagonist when he started bullying/hitting on the teacher haha. The dialog itself is pretty serviceable though and I admit the cliffhanger had my anticipation up though -- some revision/expansion and this could be something good.

Completely agree with the constructive criticism. Definitely thinking about expansion but I'm hesitant as I believe that it won't get as much reach as it did through the jam. Any advice on how to create a returning audience?

Yeahh that's kind of hard. It's difficult justifying time spent on jam stuff post-jam unless turning it into a portfolio piece or something (also why my priority in jams is always to just get something 100% finished haha). Could be an idea to just use the learnings here to apply to the next jam/game.