Hi I enjoyed it too = ] , here are some of my thoughts (sorry for the long ridiculous list, don't feel like you have to answer any of these):
1) Currently its really not much of a game, I'm not sure what your plans are, but it really feels like you might be more interested in just making a graphic novel or an animation instead.
2) Its actually fairly long, you might want to cut the demo down to 1/4 instead of like 1/2 of the whole story.
3) I'm torn between feeling that there was too much magical girl fan talk or just letting it be itself.
4) I feel like Taylor jumps in there kinda randomly and if shes a magical girl how does she have time for so much afterschool, also its literally the only other person we know, besides Sara.
5) I feel like you might have made them way too powerful, specially centralia, Amnesiac
6) I feel like there are huge gaps in info they would ask cat / centralia
7) I think they would only not get affected by cat rewinding if they are in magical girl mode, otherwise they would not have effect on the world ?
8) some reactions are kinda low key, like people disappearing should maybe be a big deal ? Was Lucky impaled in the fight with Lion lady ?
9) centralia is a weird name, didn't really get the meaning I guess.
10) luv the freaked of Lucky reaction image
Anyway, keep on going ! Good Luck