Okay, I'll be brief to avoid unnecessary crap
This is just my review and it's not a reason to fight, so please respond to criticism appropriately.
what's good about the game:
- atmosphere
- models
- narrative design
to be improved:
- story
- script
Description:
- Even the most well-designed game can be ruined by a poorly developed story and script, and this is exactly the case
In the game I saw only one real skrimer at the moment of the first entrance to the building, that's all, I gave a simulator of a cook in fast food
The ending, which does not reach the horror ending, does not justify all the efforts that the player loses on a boring fast food chef simulator
This is an error in the scenario calculations
- The scenario, first of all, feels like the developer didn't know how to keep the player engaged, which gives the feeling that the player is left to himself, uncontrollable by the scenario, which should be avoided by thinking through the scenario more closely. This will allow the developer to control every step of the player, the scriptwriter should know where the player will go and what he will do. Thus, the player is controlled by the scriptwriter, directing him wherever he wants, and this is a good example of a good script. In this case, the game looks "empty" - not filled with events. The game should be fun and engaging.
- It's very difficult to make a story centered on a criminal into a horror game because it's a situation that can be related to reality, and that's not good.
[domestic horror has the following scheme - usual thing + supernatural thing]
In this way we create a vivid contrast that allows us to present usual gray things from a different angle and to create a surreal reality. This is how it works.
The developer wanted to give the impression that the player was killed by a criminal and that hi would use main characters body for burgers and so on, but it doesn't look cool or bright. It looks gray and boring
it does not reward the player for all the boring events of the chef simulator he went through and causes disappointment
I hope this helps
p.s. If the developer is willing, I'm also not averse to working with the developer to create interesting games.
I can create 3D models, work on the plot, script and narrative