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i really want to like this because its got promise. the art and music are wonderful. but the writing really, really needs improvement. i understand that maybe you do not speak english as a first language which is totally okay but... all the spelling and grammatical errors are really going to turn people off from reading past chapter one. this game would benefit from getting somebody who speaks english as a first language to proofread and edit it. i'm willing to come back and give it a second chance if that does indeed happen, but as it stands, as much as i wish i could i wouldn't recommend it in its current state.

again, that's not to say this is a bad game and i can tell that a lot of love went into it. but if i have to spend several minutes trying to figure out what people are saying or doing in chapter one, i'm not really inclined to read further and hope it gets better.

Thank you for your feed back, we’ve already got us a native speaker for proofreading and fixing our mistakes ~

that's really great to hear! like i said, this game has a ton of promise and i don't want to see it held back by a few errors that are easily fixable. thanks for taking the time to reply and best of luck with the rest of the chapters. i will be keeping an eye on this!