That was a rather weird experience.
Nice start of a story, but the amount of grammatical errors made it almost a pain to read, the English made almost no sense in some areas and made me double check what I just read. Finding what to interact with was also a pain with the grain part.
On the other side, it's a shame it was so short, the story is quite compelling, so you've got a plus there.
My comments may be a bit harsh, but this is the best feedback I could give.