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Nice writing, I love seeing poetry in VNs, especially when it isn’t love poetry. And I love the cute cartoonish art too. (I played this like two days ago, but played a few more entries before writing this feedback, to have something to compare it to.

There’s so many categories to rate this year, so going in detail about each of them would probably make this comment really long, but here’s a summary of what I thought about when rating this entry:

Theme: a witch summoning a demon on Halloween seems like a pretty good fit for the theme. I might even replay this one on Halloween to see more of the demons, especially if it gets updated in the meantime.

Story: Really good (especially because I like poetry).

Audio categories: I might play this one again to give it another listen, but it seems to fit the game. It was a bit quiet though, at least when there aren’t other sounds playing. If the things the gods do would make noise I think that noise could be nice to hear.

Characters and art: Pretty good. The MC behaves like a YouTuber and I’d probably click that subscribe button if it were there (well, I clicked the follow button). And the cute art is nice to see and fits the story well. And I like the cat that sits there and sees everything but is probably used to weird things happening so it doesn’t even both to blink. And I like the particle effects.

UI and accessibility: I like the YouTube-inspired UI, including the textbox looking like subtitles. I like when YouTube videos have good subtitles. But I guess I’d have liked it had a play/pause button that toggled autoplay, a transcription button that shows a history screen in the side, and so on (but yeah, I know customising UI in Ren’Py can be trickier than it seems, and I’d guess the accessibility in this one is probably better than the vast majority of non-Ren’Py games in this jam).

Marketing: The page is bit short, but I like the demons on it. As for the thumbnail, it shows the artstyle and fits the game, but I feel like the text looks cut-off. The image is not as wide as a YouTube video thumbnail, so if you could move the last lines a bit to the left, it might be easier to not read “Demon” as “Demo”. And together with the log line saying “choose your demon VN” I think it does a good job t showing why one would want to play it.

What I liked most: the writing and art. What I’d suggest changing: have sound effects.

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Wow, thank you very much for the awesome feedback! I love feedback and really appreciate yours <3 So glad you noticed the poetry. I started poetry in English to improve my English skills glad it works well. Yes I definitely will work on the points you mentioned. I already made synchro for first intro part and Sfax will come. As I tried to keep the game short I still underestimate the polishing phase, I will try put as much as I can till Halloween in it <3

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Playing it today, picking “wind” at the first gate and “might of mass” at the second, then picking the leftmost option for the third choice, I got an error. And apparently copy-pasting the error didn’t work, so I typed it by hand: IOError: Couldn't find file 'Demons/Paimon.png'. I thought I’d mention it. (Also, I’m pretty sure I only posted my other comment once, so I’m not sure why it showed several times; I’ve removed the duplicates now.)

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I’m working on the rest of the demons as soon they finished will implement and fix it, thank you ☺️