Awww this was cute, in all honesty I havem't played the actual game of Obey Me but I have learned about it most notably at Tumblr and hints from it on Pinterest, but I enjoyed the plot of it, despite that I had a lot of fun with the demo version and I enjoyed myself so much that I went to the old version of the rewrite.
I have to say, I enjoyed how the characters interact with one another and how lively they feel despite them just being text on a background! I also like how I grew to be endeared by Mammon in just about minutes and learning more about him, I'm glad that I chose to be patient because really, these emotionally repressed or unavailable demons need it. The special scenes with Mammon were honestly fun and enjoyable, I loved reading through the fun scenarios they had to go through all while being aware of the competition, and speaking of it, I gotta love how Levi rambled because it was pretty fascinating to see how animated he actually is through dialogue. Very gucci.
The hints of foreshadowing and conflict is honestly good, I suppose you can expect it from the game that you're rewriting but honestly love your twirl on the plot.
I have to say, I did have some trouble, most notably from the saving feature because the background was black but the text itself was black as well. But aside from that, that was all I could tell. Looking forward to see what comes next~!