I think xour VN has a lot of potential! 😁 The characters are well contrived, and I really like some of the interactions between them. However, I do think the VN could use a good polish.
Most of the scenes are a bit too short to fully encapsulate all of the emotions and/or importance of the moment. Focusing on every other scene in the same way that xou did the sex scene will really help to express these moments better 🙂