I really like how the opening builds up the atmosphere. The following section that begins at 0:09 is very contemplative and beautiful, I think experimenting with sprinkling in more dissonant notes like 7ths and 9ths here and there might help make it even more expressive. In the build-up section from 0:54 to 1:04, gradually making the rhythm a bit more complex by adding syncopation or faster notes might help make the following slow-down even more compelling and interesting. For the final dance-like section, experimenting with syncopation in the left hand might be fun, and could help highlight the contrast between that section and the previous sections. Overall, I really enjoyed how you took one central motif and explored how to create different moods with it!
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Thank you for the very deep feedback, it's very useful, and I think everything you said makes sense. I think I've been a bit lazy harmonically, using almost only triads, and rhythmically, especially in the last part. I can imagine how your recommendation would improve the composition, so thank you so much for this!