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I can try to address most of your issues or complaints about the narrative:

1. "Another thing is that the prince/princess is always being worshipped by everyone, yet the protag, who is supposed to have this ultra divine blood, is, from a narrative perspective, sort of put into the second-place category."

 The imperial heir essentially is the leading figure in MC's generation. They have access to numerous priceless artifacts, fortune, martial arts and skills, as well as incredibly strong mentors, such as their grandfather, the current emperor and strongest martial artist in the world. Also, their aunt, the Sword Mistress, whom by Tang Ruo's account is the best sword wielder in the world. Tang Ruo is expected to become the next martial sovereign on reputation alone. Not to mention the 97% blood purity. Tang Ruo has a massive head start compared to MC, which is shown and explained when they first fight.

Meanwhile MC is the heir to a dying clan that's been having a talent drought for centuries, at least, which was only briefly broken by their father. It's even stated by the library that if nothing is done, then the Wu clan may just die off in the next hundred years. The only things going for the MC are the inherited clan martial skills and perfect blood purity. Compared to Tang Ruo, they're severely lacking in resources and experience. A mere difference of 3% blood purity isn't enough for the MC to overtake the prince/princess is a matter of months or even a few years. So, from a narrative perspective, it makes sense that Tang Ruo is going to be the more focused disciple in the martial world, for now at least.

That being said, the MC absolutely takes Ws and are a force to be reckoned with in their own right. As far as the point you are currently at, you can: beat Tang Ruo in the tournament, beat an early-Houtian for your first arena match, beat a bandit gang lead by another early-Houtian martial artist, and beat the son of the DQ who has the ability to transform, albeit partially, into Asura (most powerful transformation in the verse btw).

Also, the only things Tang Ruo has done since entering the sect was enter early-Houtian off screen, showcase their eyes of perfect replication, and then beat up Jing Guo's brother in the arena, who initially was 2 stages higher than them. It's impressive and it overshadows MC's feats by a considerable margin, but you have to remember that they have ridiculously powerful martial arts and in-born talents that the MC doesn't get due to their differences in family.

2. "Like, if Ruo is beating people in the Arena, we should be beating people in the Arena."

We do. In fact, as of current build, we have two arena fights. We haven't done an arena marathon like Tang Ruo did right before the expo, but we still get to showcase our abilities and prove ourselves to the masses.

3. Ruo copied two of our abilities with their magic eye hacks, then has not shown to use them again (on-screen at least). Besides, MC will eventually gain access to new abilities and resources that exponentially increases their power (some available in current build, in fact). Tigress gets a master before you, yes, but you eventually are recruited by an elder of the sect (again, available in current build). The protagonist is strong, it's just that the MC is constantly going up against top tiers and higher stage practitioners that you may feel otherwise.

4. "it's turned into a slog where the story doesn't make us feel like we're progressing at all - that we are always behind in a world where people are far more powerful than us, despite us apparently being born with enormous potential."

I mean, not really. MC and Tang Ruo are the top 2 of their generation, far above the likes of Ai, Tigress, and Jing Guo. MC is pretty much going against the top brass and trivializing everyone at or beneath their martial level. Literally, the only people that give the MC trouble are the ones who are at the top of peak-Houtian and above. Which makes sense, because there is absolutely no reason for MC to start clowning on people decades their senior or characters so high above their weight class.

As far as Tang Ruo goes, they do get humbled. It actually happens not that long after you left off in fact. They're still considerably stronger than you (at the point you left off), but MC quickly grows stronger, and you'll learn why.

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Maybe I wasn't clear regarding the purpose of my comment. I was offering constructive feedback to the author, specifically, in case it might be useful. 

I already understand how the narrative tries to justify why things are written the way they are. I have read the story myself. You say, "I can try to address most of your issues" but you are not actually addressing any of the issues. You are just writing a defense of the story. 

Unfortunately, I didn't write this comment to start a debate with random users in the comment section. I wrote my comment for the author. The author can choose to accept or ignore my feedback. That's all I care about. I do not care whether commenters agree or disagree with my opinion - it is totally inconsequential to the development of the story, which is the only thing I actually do care about. 

I could go over my specific objections to your comment but I really don't want to write a 10 paragraph essay on why I feel parts of the narrative are weak, despite the ways the story tries to justify it all. If the author wants me to further explain my opinion, then I will be happy to do so, because that might directly impact the development of the story. But for anyone else, no, because it will be totally unproductive.

That's all I have to say. Feel free to think whatever you want about the story - everyone is entitled to their own opinion. 

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Perhaps I came across as argumentative in my first response, and it seemed like I was jumping to the defense of the work like some rabid follower. Apologies, that was not my intention.

I interpreted your criticisms as less constructive as some of your grievances seemed to overlook some of the smaller details or events within the story that I felt would have addressed them otherwise. Of course, that isn't for me to presume.

As you've made clear, we all have our own opinions and I, like you, just want this story to prosper.