Skip to main content

On Sale: GamesAssetsToolsTabletopComics
Indie game storeFree gamesFun gamesHorror games
Game developmentAssetsComics
SalesBundles
Jobs
TagsGame Engines

Yeah I saw him the first time around, skipped on my second and I'm talking to him a third time since you asked.

Who are Argenti and Aegrit? This is not a decent story introduction. Ideally, you show don't tell but let's say you went with
-Aegrit was a novice angel tasked with guarding a jail where he met and had a crush on Argenti, the last of the demonkind. He decided to break her free and escape with her to a free haven called Edyn.
Now you have a very basic description of your main characters - an angel and a demon; you understand very superficially how they are related - a jailor and a prisoner who fall in love; you have an idea of their objective - find a place to be safe in the city of Edyn; and an idea of their motivation - escaping from persecution.

Additionally, you already start the player with 2 options east or west and even then there is a lot to walk through, and a lot of space to cover. We don't even know if this section of the story has some urgency and so should be tense or if they are just cruising the world for fun. The music seems to be tense but we don't have anything to go by in terms of story.