Great concept, seems really interesting. I think these dialogue-based games are going to really take off in popularity. I may suggest working on player on-boarding, because after 20 minutes I still have no idea what's happening or what I should be doing or how the game mechanics work. It seemed mostly like I was getting a hang of it until the first logoff, and then time started moving fast and there was no clear action except logging back in, which didn't really help resolve what should be happening.