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I voted for TTOW so I'll definitely be backing you! I had a look at the Kickstarter & I like that there's lots of screenshots, you mention the different MC personalities & the character bios look pretty. 

Some feedback:

-I think your backer rewards are good ideas (the love letters, copies of your previous games, beta access, designing an outfit, creating a character, creating a scene, etc). Another idea would be a short playable scene/scenario in between the first game & the sequel, since a lot happens in that time. It could be in the game itself, as DLC, or even a text game using Twine or Choicescript. You could also add the option to buy them as DLC when the game is released for anyone that didn't back the Kickstarter. It might be too late now to suggest something extra & I'm not sure if it would take too much time away from the main game, although it's something that'd only have to be done after the Kickstarter is finished, but I just wanted to throw it out there just in case. I think anything capitalising on the ROs in general will be popular.

-It might be a good idea to get someone who isn't familiar with either game to have a look over the Kickstarter draft. Everyone on this page has probably played TROS & is already planning to buy TTOW, which makes us a bit biased and we probably don't require as much info as someone brand new who comes across your Kickstarter.

-I think it'd be helpful to make it clearer that this is a sequel to TROS, an already published game. I know you mention it in the demo section (with a link to the itchio page), but it's a bit too easy to gloss over. You might also want to add the Steam page for TROS too.

-If you're worried about the tiers & rewards being confusing, I've seen other Kickstarters provide a breakdown grid diagram to show which rewards are available in which tiers, and I think that makes it as clear as possible. There's an example of this on this current VN Kickstarter: https://www.kickstarter.com/projects/lunarisgames/errant-kingdom

-Unless I've missed it, I think it'd be a good idea to provide links to your game dev social media accounts & a clear link to your itchio store page so people can browse your previous games.

-Make sure there aren't too many early bird backer spaces. I'm not an expert on this so I'm not sure what the right proportion should be, but most people who will back a game will pick whatever the cheapest tier is that includes the base game. So take into account how many of that tier you need to sell when deciding the number of early bird spaces.

-Other people have already mentioned that a trailer would be ideal (like the one on the TROS Steam page), and if you're releasing on Steam then you'd need to make one eventually right? If that's not possible, or in addition to this, it would be cool to include some GIFs in the campaign page, to show the gameplay (making choices, sprites changing expressions, etc).

-Mini bios of yourself & anyone else who works on the game (I think there's a separate artist?), your role in making the game, how long you've been making games, your background, any fun/silly facts about yourself, etc. may help people to see the person behind the Kickstarter.

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Many thanks you for your feedback – I’m glad to hear you like the general look of the page.

To answer some of your points…

+ I do like the scenes from between the two games (it’s actually one of the tier rewards), but I think if I were to make a whole game of them it would be very graphic intensive (if I went with the VN option over interactive fiction, that is), and I also worry it would take a lot of time away from making the main game. I  certainly might consider making a text game version, (I think a VN with all those extra backgrounds would be prohibitively expensive) but if I did it, it would just be a bonus extra I would make and release for free if I had the time.

+ A good suggestion, and I’ve already had someone unfamiliar with both games look over the page.

+ Well, I’ve mentioned it is a sequel in the title of the game, the game intro graphic, the demos section, and on the £6 tier where you can get TROS at a discount. But I’ve added it to the overview section, too, and I’ve added a link to the Steam page along with the itch page.

+ As for the tiers, well I have managed to circumvent my worries about having too many tiers if I added all the POV scenes separately, by no longer restricting backers' access to characters.

Now, the game will have 28 extra POV scenes AND whichever POV scenes backers wish to choose themselves. So if all backers at that tier choose Frederique, then that is what will be written, in addition to the 2 scenes each for TTOW and TROS which all characters (where appropriate) will get. It’s more work for me, but it’s more content and it means people can get what they paid for with no hassle.

I may put up a running total showing who has picked which characters so backers can make an informed choice, but I will no longer restrict the choice.

+ I had provided social media links on my profile, but I’ll add it to the main page, too. ^_^

+ There are 50 early bird spaces. I feel this will potentially generate enough early revenue to offset the loss in earnings.

I know people have very differing opinions on the early bird tier. I only added one at others’ suggestions and, since then, just as many people have told me to remove it. I see the logic of both sides, and I think it is one of those things where we have no way of knowing how it will turn out in this particular case until it is underway.

+ As for the trailer, I understand it is important, but as I mentioned previously, my financial circumstances right now will not provide for one (not even a cheap one). 

That said, while I was considering my options this week, I decided to try my hand at making my own. I’m not a complete newbie when it comes to this, but I certainly am rusty. If I can pull something together this weekend that I am happy with, then that is what we will go with.

Otherwise, gifs could be a good alternative/addition to this, so thanks for the suggestion.

Many thanks for taking the time to leave a detailed response and thank you, too, for your support. ^_^