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First of all, thank you for your hard work. We appreciate every effort you put into the VN. With that, I would like to give my honest review of the current update. These opinions are personal takes, feel free to add or criticize my opinions. Spoiler warning, of course. 

1. I like how you make the gals less annoying on day 3 and day 4. especially Riley with her recent background reveal. She is more tolerant towards Finn now on day 4 and so does her friends. it feels like Finn has 3 sisters instead of 1. That alone is Sweet enough to start day 4.

2. I love the fact that you add "that one gay best friend" with every GAY stereotype imaginable. I was so excited to see another TWINK join the gang. At this point, Rene is my fav char on day 4, just cause of the humor he brought me.

3. Day 4's story is kind of all over the place. So much is going on since the end of day 3. From the wedding to shooting to Max's situation ends with Riley's apology. On to day 4 TWINK reveal to MEGUKA!🗣️🔥 Then gay bar EPIC BAND BATTLE onto meeting prevy oldman right after that we had FOOD BATTLE followed by SEGGS, and not long after we get creepy stalker. Honestly, the whole day 4 feels like a fever dream. I'm not saying that day 4 is bad. The fact that it has the most comedy than any other day is quite refreshing and enjoyable. Although as a reader I couldn't help to feel confused... "WHAT'S GOING ON??!!"

4. I appreciate that you gave Artyom's character more thought. Adding more to his background bit by bit, and the rewrite on the day 2 necklace scene is sweet and romantic. It is now comparable to Mert's flower scene. Not only that day 2 rewrite is giving Artyom "More than the cover" vibes rather than the rude person he once before. Also, for the first time, Arty doesn't invalidate his advance at the end of the day. I'm quite satisfied with how it turns out.

5. As a reader, I feel like these two lines came out as rude and a bit harsh. But considering Arty's personality, it is understandable. 

It feels like I'm being told, "No, you're not replacing him ever." "But I love you now and you're still alive, that is." A bit dramatic reaction from me. I suggest changing them into something like " Of course not, He is my first love and no one is going to replace that." "But you, Finn. You remind me how it feels to like someone. To love someone again." Or add another line to Artyom's existing dialog, such as "And why would I need you to replace him? You are not his replacement, Finn. You have your own place in my heart." or something like that.

I'm happy with the changes and how the VN progresses. It has improved a lot since its release. I love the fact that you are willing to listen to the community and improve from their critiques. And I hope this vn will be greater as time goes on. Congratulations on 6K downloads!

Madoka was mentioned!
being MEGUKA IS SUFFERING

How do I access graveyard? seems to be stuck waiting in the curch while they trying to find someone to fix the bridge

I really do enjoy Mert's route. He portrays a mature caring and dotting man quite well. His route is romantic and light hearted which makes it more enjoyable. all that in mind. I'd like to give some criticism. The following points are from my own thoughts and opinions:

1. One route feels more cannon/dominant than the other. It feels like Mert is the "supposed" love interest for Finn. Mert got more screen time than Artyom and that added more depth to his character than Artyom would ever be in his own route.

2. Artyom feels like just an obstacle for the main love interest. As I said in point one, the lack of depth in Artyom's characterization is making me feel like he is a side character who only exists to compete with Mert instead of a genuine second love interest for Finn. He also left with a rude, kind of immature, and competitive man in the introduction part of the story without any reasoning behind his character. 

3. The main character favors one more than the others which is kind of bad if you want to make the mc as representative of the reader. Finn's inner thoughts favor Mert more than Artyom. Especially on the first and second days of the story. slightly less in 3rd day which is a good improvement. Finn would always think about Mert at any given time. It is kind of justified considering that Mert did save his life. Although Holger did the same too.Take a look on the second day of the story for example. Artyom tries to appeal Finn's affection by giving him a necklace that he likes while he takes the necklace that Finn likes which is romantic in a sense. Finn's reaction is dull compared to when Mert gave him a bouquet at the end of the day.

4. Artyom romance advancement always got invalidated. On day one he broke it with his rude behaviour. on day two he got shadowed by Mert and on day three he decided to take two steps behind after moving one step forward. This back and forth pattern is not a bad thing. It is actually a great thing if used correctly. It will bring some struggles and slowburns vibes into his story which would give him the depth he needs. although do not overuse it because readers can get tired of the same pattern repeating over and over.

that being said. I really enjoy this VN and I hope that it will be successful in the future.

Free him from the prison. Fight him till you can evolve Ferro and join your party. Then fight Apotus and win after that reach out to Ferro.

I'm missing finalle of corruption secret achievement anyone know how to get it?

how can I progress in Kata'rash wood? I keep repeating the same area over and over again

Anyone know how to get 3rd piece of the eye of the void? I already got two from Ethrex and Lost Naga

Does he get stronger each time I lose to him?  The chain still won't break off after getting struck multiple times while struggling. 1 lost to him 4 times and currently attempting 5th run. I got immediate chain bind at 3rd turn.

how do you break Demon lord's chain. I Literally wasted 10+ stun grenades and spam strugles and it won't break. Like seriously???? perma chained??

Is it possible that Hunter will grow into big himbo boy? 

I'm stuck figuring out how to  get "helping rarox out" and making my self "goopable". If making my self goopable is going trough Harold's gym scene then I have problem getting it since he didn't show up in the gym after big Mac's appearance. Already did all the stuff with Harold tho. Anyone can help? 

how do I get Nix's ending? i seem to can't get to the right passage to get the ending and end up in Cray's instead

anyone know how to meet Rarox?

Candy torture indeed. kinda remind me of Nu:Carnival where i need to think for pron game. it's fun finished with 1870 points  i would give 420/69 great stuff.

I mean yeah sure, I can take Whirlwind. but the NUKE. THE NUKE. not me wanting some damage per screenshot

Maybe some adjustment to the angel fight? I'm building single-hit nuke with rampage and revenge but angle's barrier is just impossible to drop.

you still can bot for roushk if you won while having a dominant role and bottom preferred position. the power bottom variant. or should i say:

For the bottom, you must lose the training by only having stats lower than 20 while being a submissive and bottom position. (in other words be submissive and breedable)
For top. beat Roushk in the training by having stats above 25 I think? you must be dominant and your position must be a top. (in other words giga chad alpha male mode)

there's a bottom dominant variant. beat Roushk and be dominant while having bottom position

how do I get training talk for Roushk? I have 2 hearts, I already did top/bot variants and the lust incense variants too but still no new conversation.

sorry kinda new to the game but how do i get the wolf companion? 

Is there lists of datable characters? I would like to know if Yuki is one of them. Also, what can i gift to each characters? since there's "Gift" option but i cannot figure the items.

Is this still available after finishing the current update?

I'm having trouble getting the blacksmith slime suit Cgs. Can anyone help me with it? what should I do after getting slime strip and rescuing Tuon? is there any corruption level required

I mean the other option in his seggs scene. The one beside "grow"

Is it possible to make the Cobra warlock grows in this current version?

thanks!

Yeah done the bottom part. But is there a way i could go down there or maybe pull the Barrel back?

Spoilers!

So I've been trying the barrel puzzle for 30 mins. I only managed to get one done. Maybe I'm just stupid. But can someone help me with this?

Next victim is Lakkos!

Essence surge stacked until 110k power 💀

Im having trouble getting "incomplete memory" achievement wich end i have to do to get that? Pls it's my last achievement 😭

a question. is there currently a way to increase imp's corruption?

you need to craft spectral sirup. you can learn how to craft heat occisia from othra, then return home make a spectral sirup.

recipes:

Berry Pulps (blue green red black yellow white): any berry with same color

Heat Ocissia: slot 1: angel leaf, slot 2: pulp red and slot 5 water lilly

Spectral Sirup : slot 1: pulp (blue), slot 2: heat occisia, slot 3: pulp (red), slot 4: heat occisia and slot 5: pulp (blue)

after you're done with the sirup, gave it to berny and wait for couple of days. i forgot how long.