... man. Minecraft really fucked some of y'all up, huh?
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I really enjoy the story so far. The prose is generally excellent, but I have a few criticisms: namely the goofy descriptions of lewd things. It takes away from an otherwise potentially character building or provocative scene when you call it "batter" or breasts "orbs".
Also I find it odd how you don't seem to have an explanation for why our ostensibly normal human protagonist is capable of producing obscene amounts of fluid. A curse, mutation or spell to fuel that particular fetish could go a long way.