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I can save her

I too am in love with June

i can fix her

I have both and they work. The former modifies game resources; this one adds new ones.

This is decent! I enjoy the twist and the pacing. The character is fairly unique. The idea of a pushy real estate agent that has something to hide certainly adds to the creep factor as someone who had to deal with a real estate agent recently. I also like the art and the backgrounds, which aid its surrealist aura. Maison's strange mien contributes to the phantasmagoric feel of the whole experience. 

My complaints are relatively small ones. They mostly revolve around the prose. I would suggest looking into an editor if you do not have one already. As a game, it functions perfectly fine. As a piece of writing, there are quite a few grammatical errors (I noticed maybe two instances of improper apostrophes for instance; "look's" when used as a verb should not have an apostrophe—that makes it possessive). The tenses also occasionally switch from past to present—"you make sure," present, followed by "you really wanted," past tense.

I would be remiss to criticize the voice of it, as this is a visual novel; voice is never the appeal. I would suggest, though, putting more verbs in perfect tense rather than imperfect: instead of "he seemed to be struggling," "he seemed to struggle"—or "it was sounding more and more fishy" to "it sounded more and more fishy"—though "it sounded fishier," would work better, since "fishy" has a comparative form.

None of these points ruin the experience, to be sure. Continue working on this series! You have a great thing going here that clearly resonates with people.