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Miles

• I love the idea of different endings, they're always so interesting and you can always see how the actions of the players affect what ends up happening! I also love the symbols of the items and I love the artstyle! Keep up the good work!! :DD

Kiana 

• The concept art for the character is really cool and I like the choice of color and it's very pleasing to the eye. I like that this game is a choice-based and that each choice you make changes the game of the plot. I'm excited to see how this game turns out

Keying

• I really love that the game tells an emotionally profound story through a simple visual novel, between Elara and her adoptive father Kuno. The relationship between them really moved me. The game's choice system makes every decision feel important. I like the design of each memory having a different ending, it really makes me curious about the possible choices and seeing the various possible endings. Although the game is still in development, it already demonstrates great emotional power, especially its delicate depiction of character growth. I’m looking forward to seeing the finished product! Also, your brief is really shocking to me. The background display in the form of illustrations and the elements of the starry sky made me feel very mysterious and attracted!

Kathy H

• The way you presented this game pitch is so good, honestly got me super hooked and excited to see how the game developed. Everything is so very well planned that I really can’t give you any feedback. What I really love about this presentation would have to be your thumbnails and storyboarding. Personally, I really love looking at the behind the scenes of everything, so that part of the presentation is so very well done.

Hejin Jo — 

• Really love this story with cozy mood, I’m sure it’s going to be a well-made game

 Julien (Industry Guest)

• Love your voice Donna
• Clear pitch deck with illustrations
• separate synopsis and mechs
• Get into elara earlier in the presentation and why should we care about her 

Tamika

• From gameplay perspective its really cool and awesome
• using pseudo code slash logic so early is so great
• great presentation

Hayden

• I really love the art design and overall first looks at the game, I'm excited to see how its incorporated into the final end product

Riss Pozzi 

• Love the use of memories and different endings to the game

brooklyn 

• I like your game's use of time to progress the story. I also like how your game uses point and click mechanics to make important game changing decisions.

Ben 

• I love this art style and story line/board, personally I’d enjoy interactive game so it would be cool if there was little mini games

Aleena R.S 

• Such an amazing overall design. The story and art is very strong, I believe with time and more playtesting, you'd be able to create a reason for the players to care about the MC and her story. Definitely keep playing around with the different possibilities that are available for the players to end with. I wonder if there are reward systems in the game, it would make the play feel more accomplished maybe?

Alice Chen 

• I like your illustrations and art style, and the theme is very interesting. I really like visual novels. Be careful about the workload and make sure the storyline is clear and simple.

Cassidy Meng 

• The game's emotional depth really shines, even in its early stages, particularly in how it portrays the growth of Elara and her adoptive father, Kuno.  Their bond is genuinely moving, and the choice system makes every decision feel impactful.  The starry sky elements and illustrations create a captivating and mysterious atmosphere, enhancing the overall experience.  I’m impressed by how a simple visual novel can tell such a profound story.

Ganlin Du 

• Strong game art and design! I like the concept that every player's choice will impact their bond and her emotional growth. Looking forward to the final product.

Alicia P 

• Very nice aesthetic art and well thought out gameplay, very straightforward!!

Rojina Pedramy

• I feel like there is an experience of the designers in the game, as it talks about memories and exploring them . I like the open ending, there is a sense of adrenaline to it. 

Kat Russell 

• oooh the concept is super cool, I love butterfly effect kind of games like until dawn, diverging endings make for a unique gameplay experience. The character and the concept art is super cool, I love how easy this presentation is to follow. I feel like I have a clear picture of what this game is going to be like! Wowww the art is fantastic yall. Good job can't wait to play

Stella 

• I really enjoyed your presentation, you did a great job, and I look forward to seeing what you come up with next!! Your creativity is amazing

Joyboy 

• rich rich story, I'm curious if ambient sounds can be added to help draw in the player to your world. This could look like recorded footsteps playing as the player walks, or the sound of wind blowing outside a window, or the occasional howl of a wolf or summin. This could also be synths playing that correlate to the mood of the scene / moment

Ally 

• I like how everything is detailed and lets us know the progress of creating the game. I really look forward to the story that will be told. The art(character and Background) is also matching very well while drawn by different artists.

Emma (Professor)

• Very well done. You seem to know what you're doing and have confidence
• Maybe add an ambiguous option? More of a suggestion then anything