Thank you for your kind words and feedback. I do agree with your point about how it is necessary for the plot to exclude certain from a main character who is stuck in another world. This is what I was aiming for when writing Aquarii, though I do admit that I may have accidentally included information that was not originally available for readers who did not make certain choices, and I have started to go back and fix that. Hopefully I can clear up any confusion that the current build may have caused. ❤️
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I’m confused about your first statement about the ship? I’m assuming you’re talking about the one that was used to capture MC and then was destroyed when MC landed in Aquarii. That ship was mentioned multiple times, and MC started the game in that same ship. Unless you’re talking about another ship being built, which various characters also mention how creating another spaceship to take MC home would take a while. Second, I can see how this might not be clear, but MC knows they’re on a different galaxy because they remember flying and landing on a planet that they have never seen before. Even if they may not know they’re on a different galaxy yet, they know they’re in a different world, but they can make the inference that since they were flying, and they’re surrounded by various space equipment, that they may have landed on another planet. But again, I can go back and add details about seeing the black abyss of the universe and the stars when MC watches Allele and Roux escape through an escape pod and when they’re landing on Aquarii.
As for your next few points, yes, all of the stuff about Izar changes depending on which choices you picked. That is another thing I’ll make sure I fix. But as for the war, the Mitans, Virrians, gods, and demigods mention the possible war multiple times, it’s the main focal point of the game. The entire reason why MC is training is because of a possible war, and the entire reason why the gods feel under threat because of MC existing is because of the possible war. As for your last point, I don’t think it’s implied that MC has no idea what they’re doing, rather that they aren’t trained. Some people are born with a natural fighting ability, yes, but a street fighter might not last long against a trained bodyguard, for instance. MC might have good instincts, but they are not trained and don’t have a lot of experience. That’s what the training scene was centered around, MC need to be able to hold their own against skilled military fighters and attackers that Izar might send.
I plan to go back and look over the parts where I agreed should be clarified, and I can take a moment to look over the areas where you were also confused, but I hope I could clear some things up for now. Again, thank you for your feedback. Hopefully I can make Aquarii less confusing. ❤️
Thank you for the commentary about Izar. I originally thought I implied that he was the ruler of the other galaxy, since the Virrians are mentioned a few times, and the Mitans speak of them as if they’re somewhere else. But after rereading some of the text, I can also see how this might not be clear, so I can go back and clarify.
As for your second point, I’d appreciate if you could name any of the other instances that MC or someone else mentioned information that was not given before? This is something I’ve been trying to avoid, so I’d appreciate if you could pinpoint other instances. Thank you for your feedback, I appreciate your thoughts on Aquarii. ❤️
Thank you for all the notes! I am aware that I tend to overdescribe things, but your tips are really helpful! I'll make sure to take note of that and work on rewriting a bit of the description scenes.
I am also aware that the MC currently does not have a lot of reactions to the situation that they're in. In truth, I wanted to focus more on exposition in the prologue and first chapter. But after reading your review, I do recognize that I may have overdone it with the explanations, I did want to have some things explained earlier because this does take place another another galaxy with a new species, so I wanted to give some context to readers so things made a bit of sense.
But, I can look back through the story and try to incorporate scenes that answer these questions indirectly.
Also, thank you for alerting me that I did not introduce Estelle and Amare during their introduction scenes, I'll go back and fix that.
Your feedback is much appreciated! Hopefully, you can see some changes when chapter two comes out.