No way I can forgive her! She abandoned us! At first I was hopeful and looking forward to find her and reunite, but seeing what she has been doing this whole time really set me off. TWENTY YEARS. And all that time I could have been chilling in Vinia?? Maybe visiting pops at his cozy little cottage in sleepy Salt Bay every now and then?!
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A good story with relatable elements. A few of the characters seem quite rounded, it is good to see them develop. A handful of others seem flat and placed in only for the fantasies, which this is that kind of game so it's understandable. The same can be said for some of the scenes. However the rest of the story is engaging so far and Ashe's attempt to understand herself and those around her while dealing with insecurities and trauma is written well. I look forward to seeing the story developed further! My only gripe, is that I was hoping to save my Ashe's virginity for a certain someone, but there comes a moment in the story where intercourse is offered and Ashe accepts it. Perhaps it will make for interesting storytelling in later chapters, but if possible I would like to choose who Ashe does the deed with.