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Hello! first off apologies for the late reply this comment was left in the middle of the night for my timezone. And I'm sorry about that, I've reuploaded the flie so that should fix any issues hopefully. But this is the first time someone has reported this problem so I'm not sure if it's anything on my end. If it still doesn't work I can message you/email you the pdf also :)
I thought this was really great! I loved the visuals and the idea of a surreal horror mile long walk to the bathroom through your trans related trauma is really good, and the positive ending was a nice touch. I also though the inclusion of the transmed with his fatphobia and transphobia was very apt and accurate, shows how too many trans people internalise the way our oppressors see our community and lash out at other trans prople.
I'm always happy to see representation of being a young trans boy. Some parts definitely reminded me of my own adolescence! It was a nice quick game and I encourage you to keep making stuff like this! I know this game is 4 years old now so I'm sure you've been working on your creativity since, but since you asked for advice I'd suggest working a bit on characterisation :) what I mean by that is if we're only with a character for a short time then every detail is significant, so it would be nice to elaborate on some specific memories the characters has like ripping his jeans, his friend who bought him his hoodie etc, a bit more detail to make the character feel more specific and real. But like I said, I found the character endearing and enjoyed the game.
Wow! Really beautiful collection of poetry, loved the use of the photos as well. My favourite poems from this collection were Boiling Blood because of its powerful ending, Willow and the simple but inventive use of imagery, and Lost Childhood because the extended metaphor of the cigarette smoke used to symbolise childhood trauma was really cleverly done. :) Definitely gonna read your other stuff sometime!