HatTrkPatrk
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Fantastic work!! I got hooked on your story within minutes of starting it. The characters are very well-written and I want to know what happens next, especially with what happened at the end (of 0.2)!
Other people here have mentioned Eternum which is one of my favorite AVNs out there; I personally don't like to "rank" works like these against each other, as if there needs to be a pecking order, but I will say the enjoyment and intrigue I got from reading through Between Humanity is the same greatness I got from it. The biggest flaw for both is there isn't more to read yet! 馃榿
Do you have a certain number of chapters in mind, or is it too soon to say?
Thank you for putting this one out there. You've made the foundation to something amazing here and I can't wait to see where it goes. 馃憤馃憤
Fantastic VN, equal parts funny, erotic, silly, character...y?... beautiful, detailed, and all around well-written. Amazing facial expressions on all the characters, and the cutscenes are amazing. The voice acting isn't gonna win any Tonys anytime soon but it was such a pleasant and unexpected surprise. You can tell when a story is given real care by its author. This is one of those stories. 馃憤馃憤
Great game! I'm completely immersed in this story. Any game that develops a sense of history/lore automatically has my interest, and this VN takes that and runs with it pretty well!
The only issue I'm currently having with it (and I'm only on Chapter 2, so maybe this won't be a thing for long) is there's a considerable change in the writing from Ch1 to Ch2. Chapter 1 was mostly written well but Chapter 2 could use some serious TLC from a proofreader. I don't want to judge too harshly, not knowing if the writer is a native speaker... but so many run-on sentences, missing or incorrect punctuation, subject-verb agreement, so much seems to be all over the place and at times it's jarring to read and distracting from the actual storytelling, which itself is interesting, engaging, and has me invested.
[EDIT/UPDATE]: Can confirm, this didn't stay an issue for long. There are still things here and there, but I'm down to the last chapter and can say it hasn't been a bothersome distraction ever since. Seems to be much less of an issue in later chapters.
But so far that's my only negative critique, and while it's been distracting many times I've still been able to grasp the story, so in the end it hasn't ruined anything for me and ultimately amounts to a nit-pick. I keep wanting to know more, and there are things happening that I didn't expect which is great!
Can't put this one down. Great work overall! 馃憤馃憤