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always some people stressed about historical accuracy in a fantasy world with magic and draconians 😭😭

this comment is so goofy 😭 armchair historian who thinks men can only think and speak a particular way saw there was an option to pick your pronouns and decided to fight ghosts talking about some "woke stuff is a turn off for me" LOL

just wanted to drop in in light of ur progress update to say that while we love ur story and of course cant wait for more to be released ur health always comes first! dont let deadlines or pressure from any readers take priority over whats best for u; best of luck with ur healing & we'll be waiting for u whenever ur ready! take care of urself and thank u again for a wonderful story 💗

i was just giving u some constructive feedback on ur points.. its criticism, not a dick, dont take it so hard.

i love this! ive been going down an if rabbit hole lately and this is easily one of my favourites <3 i cant wait for more!

when i get to the bird scene in chapter 2 though, my screen just goes white; is that normal?

this if is brilliant and im loving it so far! there are a few chunks of writing that feel a bit clunky but theyre such a minor thing and the story and characters are sooo good!! theres one issue right now where when ur choosing who to attack (vira, swordsman or rhiane), the options for the swordsman and rhian both take u to the same scene, attacking rhian. love the story and cant wait to see where u take it 💗 im an absolute sucker for angst so im an absolute sucker for ILYAAAA </3333 im invested!

this is just bad criticism lol... 

why would the author show the mc living a normal day when the premise is obviously built around u not remembering who u are? on top of that, the hook already involves the introduction of some sort of mob boss, a man being murdered off screen and a contract killer being hired, which was clearly enough to pique the interest of 99% of the commenters.

u are the literary equivalent of someone who needs a soap cutting clip on top of a subway surfers vid to hold ur attention 💀 if u want to give constructive criticism, keep it objective criticism. dont whine because an author didnt cater to ur warped personal standards

this is great! i know this is only a demo but so far im loving the writing, plot, and characters 💗!! the writing feels so emotive and the characters reactions to ur character returning the way u do after so long feel incredibly real and well done 💗 keep up the great work and i cant wait for the next chapter to come out!

also... the slowburn with lee is killing me 😭❤️‍🩹

came back for a reread and the writing feels even better 💗 i can't wait for part 2! one thing i'm curious about is having chosen to prefer physical prowess to magic initially, i'd like to balance them out so they're pretty similar; will there be any choices later in the game that we get locked out of if we don't focus on one skill, either magic or physical prowess? will increasing them equally lock us out of the higher difficulty choices for both?

What the hell Allen

no worries! the game was good enough i felt obliged 😭

ill report any more errors i find when i replay this after the next update drops!

and thank u for answering time frame question! dont feel any need to rush urself, work at ur own pace and we'll be waiting eagerly for whatever comes next! have confidence in ur writing; it's gorgeous <3

thanks agin for creating such a great game and i cant wait to see what happens next! 💗

i created an account just to say this anyway thank u so so much for making this game

this is the best game ive ever found on here omg 😭 the writing is masterful and the story is an absolute gem. i love absolutely everything about it!! the warden's trauma really tugged on my heartstrings and i adore all the characters especially lea 🥺💗 i need to protect her💔!!

i did notice some spelling and grammatical errors during various chapters that came up in the choices, as well as one during the actual story and a single instance where gabriel's gender (set to female) swapped to male. they were pretty rare and all very minor but ill do my best to go back through and report them on your google form!

also! can i ask when you're expecting to put out the next part/chapter, if you have a planned schedule or any idea how long it might take? no rush, and ill be here for it regardless! ive just come to the end of this and its so brilliant im begging