I have a couple corrections though. Remmy keeps getting called 'him' or 'he' after being rescued. I dont exactly remember if Remmy is a futa in the first game but it should still be her right?
Also after Steven gives us his 100 soldiers, the last line before ending the scene is "Yes Sir!". Franco is supposed to say it but our character says it instead.
There was one more issue between us talking to Miriyila's brother Funigold? was it?. Between talking to him and the ending of that talk, us going back and scene end. In that area also there is some issue i cant remember right now.
Lastly I cant tell you how happy i am to see the majority of politics and high position cast being handsome hunky men in the story. Its a great way to let the fappers be content with the NPCs being females with the important ones being male. Its getting very tiring with 99% of the H game products coming out having females in each and every damn place. While its supposed to be a fapping thing, it gets repetitive very fast.
I really respect you for taking the chance and making the change. Especially since this work of yours doesnt look small time scale in any way.