I found another spelling mistake. When you’re looking at the polaroid of Akano and Kaori, “but one has been nearly completed burned out.” You must’ve meant to say completely instead of completed. You could also use the word ‘burnt’ instead of burned, that’s up to you. :]
spelling problem I noticed that you probably don’t give a shit about: when akano asks if he can sit and chat with you, quiet is spelled as ‘quite’. (not criticism at all, just letting you know so other people won’t have to acknowledge it.)
