I've completed all endings so far, this game made me feel some emotions and opinions so I decided to write this review. I'm scatterbrained, and so is this review so sorry lol ;p
MAJOR SPOILER WARNINGS. DO NOT READ REVIEW IF YOU HAVE NOT PLAYED/COMPLETED THE GAME!!
first of all, I really love the cosmic elements of this game. It's unique, and it shines through the plethora of other phycological/romantic visual novels of this kind. I was a bit disappointed that the ray endings didn't have much elaboration. We get a little bit of backstory from the comment thread but it would've been cool if more was uncovered during this ending as it can be argued this is the "true" Ray/Binary Star ending. We also get snippets of what his life was like during Binary Star and the hero's association but it's never really fleshed out and it's disappointing because I bet this would've been a really intriguing plot if the player decides to go with ray's ending. In general, if the hero vs villains concept had more cosmic features to it I believe this story would stand out a lot more.
alien invasion feels too comic/satire like for me to take it seriously as a major plot point, which it is in one of the endings. Whenever they mention alien invasion i just think of 60 seconds lol. Maybe if the aliens were more expanded upon and were given unique features and name for the species but the author never really goes into depth so i feel detached. Tell me more about these aliens, how were they created? how do they work? why are they so evil? why do they hate humans?
the family backstory for the MC is unnecessary and it would've made more sense if they were a mid 20's villain escapee with no kids who stole to provide for their own family instead of kids. Especially since the way the MC acts throughout the game is childish and they hardly thinks about her kids except for a few times, which is unrealistic especially considering the circumstance. They would've at least reached out once throughout the start of the game to see how the kids or caretaker is doing. Also, knowing the character of Double, how come he doesn't use the kids against MC? either way, this could've been rewritten/developed more
MC acts like they are a civilian rather than a villian in most parts. They hardly show off their (i'd assume to be) expansive insider knowledge of the heros vs villian fighting except for one instance. they also act repulsed/shocked at whenever ray/binary star does some wild shit when the MC should be used to it, hell, even attracted to it.
double feels like a cartoon villian. I love his concept as a character but its hard to see him as a character rather than a caricature. His name also reminds me of double stuffed oreos so theres that
there are moments, especially when ray shows of his cosmic roots, where the writing really shines. There are occasional grammar/spelling errors and sometimes the writing feels inappropriate for serious scenes. (example, the scene where MC gets kidnapped. explaining the bloodshed as "pinatas" does not immerse the reader or make them feel the same horror the MC feels while watching your love interest slaughter a bunch of villains for you lol.
theres also a lot of instances where they tell instead of show. It's more acceptable with visual novels since, they're well-visual-but sometimes this happens even when intense scenes are happening.
for instance: instead of saying "despite ray's stony facade i can sense some sadness in his tone"
expand on the 'sadness' expand on how it's subtle and how the character can still decipher it. Use this as an opportunity to reestablish the MC's closeness with Ray.
the art is really pretty and one of my favorite things about the game next to the GUI design. The main menu is really cool and I can tell a lot of thought went into it.
Overall though, I enjoyed playing this game. It was fun. There is a lot of potential in this game, and I hope my feedback is helpful to the creator!
