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Visiting your villain ex in jail is such a fun concept!

Yes!

Wait can we talk about the possible drama that comes with being close to Celeste and romancing Lune???

I've been trying to buy this game through itch.io and every time I press pay with paypal it redirects me to the itch.io homepage.

Uh this was SO good I feel personally attacked!

Personally, I wouldn't mind if the racism/race wasn't really mentioned within the game. I can understand why the author wouldn't want to write that, and have read/played games that I really enjoyed that didn't. It definitley would make it more realistic and relatable, but only if done well. As for the MC being a POC and trying to convince/change the mind of the love interest, I (personally) wouldn't want that. Having experienced a lot of conversations with bigoted people it gets really tiring trying to justify your existence (especially to people you care about). Although, that trope is definitley used in fantasy games among the races and I don't mind it as much, probably cause their not real. Thanks for being interested in my thoughts lol :)

I love reading stories that are influenced or about different types of cultures, loving what you got so far. Can't wait to see the finished product 😍

I'm really excited to see where the story goes and hope this feedback helps!

1. The MC didn't come across as partiuclarly feminine, cis, or white- then again we're only one chapter in so that might change? As a brown skinned Latina it's super important to me with customizable games that they don't feel super white-washed. Will skin color/ethnicity change the way people address or speak about you in the regency era or is that avoided? 

2. As for choices in making an MC, again I feel like it's a little soon for me to have a concrete opinion about it. I'm guessing throughout the story we will be given choices/dialogue/reactions that will solidfy our character in the world. I will say the options you gave us in demo were very natural and fitting within the chapter.

3. I didn't catch any spelling errors. As for awkward phrasing I think that's more to do with me having ADHD and getting into the groove of reading, especially if someone has a particular writing style. 

4. I found nothing within the chapter offensive or ignorant. 

I hope everything goes well for you and you can get past any roadblocks in your mind with your writing. I feel the same when i'm writing, the constant overthinking and asking myself if what I've written is good enough. Good luck! :)

Is this even a question? Yay of course!