i've gone through 18 runs now. still haven't stopped the comet, but i got to spend the last days with these characters that i have so quickly grown to love over and over again. i love this game. you, author, are a wonderful person. (and i just adore esteban. what a sweetheart)
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i love this so so so goddamn much... reminds me of 2020, when i was just barely a teenager and navigating my way through online friends, fandom, discourse, "love", and everything that comes with being in the actual fandom part of tumblr... made me feel so noostalgic in the best and worst kinds of ways. <3
there are a few errors in grammar, the first being on the prologue page. the third sentence isn't incorrect, just odd to read. "gold is the meaning of which house they are from" also is a bit off, maybe change it to something like "the gold signifies their house" or "the gold shows where they are from." the options to choose hair length and color are also off, mostly with "bald scalp" "braid" and maybe "mohawk." i'd suggest changing these to "lack of" "braided" and something like "mohawked" "spiked" or even just "styled" hair. this might be an error on my part, but i'm not sure what you mean by "lick-ing"? maybe "liking"? this is on the same page as the hair options. you should also change "go" to "going", and on the next page (if you choose the laughter option) you say "his brother" when i think you mean either "her brother" or "his sister." remove the comma in "living with them for a short time,".
otherwise, the colors look great and i love the story so far! keep up the great work :)
this game nearly made me cry. this is how i feel every day. quick rant: it probably sounds weird but i have something like phantom limb syndrome. for wings. even as i'm laying in bed right now im shifting around trying to get comfortable on them. yeah, i think im otherkin now that im writing this out. but my point is, this story is the first time i've felt seen. thank you.