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So glad to see that this hasn't been abandoned, have always love this wip and glad it will survive the purge, and looking forward to any future updates - no rush, school comes 1st but it's great to hear that you're still working on it. 

Yeah, it's gonna take some time for my mc to actually like these people. He's been kidnapped (and was freaking out when a bunch of criminals took him forcibly to a second location, bc you should never let kidnappers take you to a second location), and coerced. Also didn't really appreciate his new 'team members' 'just playing a game' and scamming a minimum wage worker who will probably be made to pay the difference of whats been stolen or end up being fired. Everyone seems terrible, from Jonna and KJ to the crew. I came in wanting to play some fun be gay and do crimes stuff but everyone seems pretty tone death. The mc to me just seems too much of a normal smuck to get involved with this to have a good time and jump all in from all of the backgrounds provided (sans the more morally grey one of selling solen goods) - maybe if there was more choices of more 'wild' and morally grey backgrounds but having the mc being something as plain as a uni dropout or someone coming out of a emotionally draining relationship just doesn't seem to be the mc to have a good time with all this. 

Bonding with the crew doesnt seem to be working right now, and I feel like there has to be something big to happen where the mc is majorly shafted by Jonna to actually get into the insurance fraud/car theft. The Mc right now just feel's like to much of a normie outsider to really vibe with what the crew has going on to me.

I had a bug where I went with Crave to the kennels to see the dogs, but every scene after treated it like I hadn't seen them.

Thank  you for this but how do you open the file to read? I have never come across a .epub file and do not know what programme it is.

submitted :)

that was awesome! was sad when it ended

I hate to be that guy and correct me if I'm completely wrong and out of line - BUT if youre talking about the words 'white knuckled' or having 'white knuckles' its not literally describing the mc's skin tone - it's a common term used to describe displaying or characterized by extreme excitement or fear. I think it's called 'white' because when you clench your fist hard enough, you can actually see the knuckle bone.  But yeah, in interactive fiction with no set description I think these are phrases that you should probably be wary of when youre writing,  like the phrase 'turning red' when describing  a character blushing or 'turning blue' if a characters cold