Ah man, Farah will not recover from this. I am not very patient around kids nor do I like them any so that probably influences this opinion, but boy oh boy I'd be so pissed. I definitely understand why she did it; she's young, spoiled in a way MC and Nour weren't, confused, and going through her own troubles but Christ I would just force the girl out instead of listening to her whine.
This is the family I wish I had, reading scenes with Da or Pa healed a little piece of my soul. I do find it funny that I named my MC Ravi because I found it more fitting for him than the full name so when Oswin accidentally said Ravi it was just his name- XD
I haven't read through this yet but seeing that Evelyn is from Minnesota sent an arrow of cold shock into my heart. Born and raised Minnesotan and no one ever mentions us! Idk I found it funny-
Now I don't know how well I'll be able to help long run, but here is some stuff to help with the current two items. And I don't the specifics of this and am a noob in coding as well, but here is some helpful stuff.
For what you have so far, pretty good. Very engaging and for the most part it's a good read - obviously the grammar/coding stuff needs a little work, but I like it a lot. I liked it so much, when I got the puppy, I named it Frog for that extra agony.
I really liked this; writing is good although there are numerous grammatical errors. I recommend getting a proofreader/editor, or just double/triple checking your writing. But seriously it's pretty good.
Let me tell you I was about to throw my mouse when I reached the end. I didn't want it to end. Quick note on spelling/grammar, numerous times the word "settling" was used instead of "setting."
