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TLDR; love the game!

As (despite being?) a cis male, reading the MC's journey of self-exploration and discovery feels incredible, kudos for so much attention on the characterization and narrative of the game. The slow burn is mandatory, and just like the MC I'm loving the teasing, especially Jen's! She's absolutely incredible, and I'm hoping you'll have the time and budget to reveal more about her!

Props for Damien and Seth too, particularly the former; the way his flaws are revealed and considered actually makes me even more fond of him, instead of antagonizing.

Wynne was a sudden reveal, and she's turning out great, IMO! Were it not for Corey being in a steampunk AR, I'd be suspicious of Wynne's true identity. Also, I'm fairly close to betting the mayor Mai is actually Dr. Boss, lol.

Carol, Amy, and Anne are also interesting characters, I'm curious how they'll continue to be part of the story.

As for the game itself, I really enjoyed the mechanics and puzzles on the underwater structure, fascinating the way those blue tiles altered the map, jumping from one collumn to the other (influence from Indiana Jones? lol), as well as the Mist and Dive spells. Not to mention that, since I've got the Shovel, I'm always on the lookout! I admit to being eager to see how innovative you'll be as the game grows.

Also, I must object on your estimation of playtime for the public release: 8 hours? Please, I'm already at 15 hours, and I haven't even tried the Reluctant path yet!

Last but not least, the tentacle spellbook? A masterpiece! Laughed and wow'd so much at all it produced! Will Jen keep teasing the MC about it? I sure hope so!

There's more that I could say, but I'll save it for another post in a future update. Very eager to know how will all the current paths and doors blocked be opened as well as what will be on the other side. I really hope you'll keep enjoying developing this game as much as we'll definitely enjoy playing it! Thank you for sharing this early release!

P.S.: If it's on your plans to eventually publish it on Steam, it will be an instabuy for me!

Excellent starting point, the art is great, the potential for this is cool, too; will the player share his girlfriend remotely, or will there be the possibility for live rewards, and so on. And I'm imagining what if Mio sent the video they did with her BJ'ing him instead of the personalized video or the vid chat at the end...

Really looking forward for the updates!

Cheers!

(copy from my original post in your announcement *blush*)

Hi. Liked the second chapter, it keeps the groove from the first. Overall, it's cool, but there are some things I'd like to point out:

The main detractors in this game are still, in my opinion, the lack of a proofreader and the limitations on art (the background of the inner bar, were those guys wearing medieval clothing?). I also need to point out that the gym is called Electronia, the main girl is called Elec, and their (best?) friend is called Tronia; I'd recommend spending some time thinking about what kind of characters do you want them to be and find names that are typically associated with such - just as an example, I'd change Elec's name for a celebrity with the reputation of cheating (not only in relations, but any kind of cheating, as in games for instance), and Tronia's name with that of a thief (because she wants to "steal" Aron, get it?). But that's just my opinion.

This being your first game, I can understand if you're not ready to start branching yet, but I'd really like for the player to have the option of going with Tronia or staying to watch Elec at the bar. Actually, IIRC, didn't the player used to have the option in the gym for deciding whether Elec being hit upon or wearing more revealing clothes? Any way, it's cool if you're going for a linear experience.

At the end, when they leave the bar, the missing bouncer at the door was a bit of a downer, as I had been curious whether Tronia would tease the guy, give him her number and/or her panties, or something else; instead, nothing happened, and if that was your intention then it's cool.

I can't recall where, exactly, but there was a part when one of them mentions playing something, and I thought that was a great opportunity for a little self-publicity, maybe with a teaser for a future game? ;-P

Also, as a minor nitpick, although it's up to each player an estimate of how much time Aron and Tronia left Elec alone, it's a bit weird, maybe, that when they came back from their fun at the back (pun intended!), they found the missing girl in the backroom serving a rando and complaining that he didn't last long. In the next chapter, will there be another scene where Elec confesses to Aron everything she was up to? And what were her feelings for being left alone with a stranger back at the bar when they decided to have some fun? Between getting hot having some dude rub himself against her can be distracting, was she ok with her company just leaving like that? How deep you want to go with your game is entirely up to you, and I'm not really complaining, but there is a lot of room being left behind to further develop your characters. If you want to, that is. Frankly, I imagine most people who download the games with the Adult tag, are looking for a simpler, more graphic, experience, but to each their own.

As with my previous comment, this is just feedback from a player who's enjoying your game and is interested to see where it will go. No offence or disrespect is meant.

Cheers!

Hi. Liked the second chapter, it keeps the groove from the first. Overall, it's cool, but there are some things I'd like to point out:

The main detractors in this game are still, in my opinion, the lack of a proofreader and the limitations on art (the background of the inner bar, were those guys wearing medieval clothing?). I also need to point out that the gym is called Electronia, the main girl is called Elec, and their (best?) friend is called Tronia; I'd recommend spending some time thinking about what kind of characters do you want them to be and find names that are typically associated with such - just as an example, I'd change Elec's name for a celebrity with the reputation of cheating (not only in relations, but any kind of cheating, as in games for instance), and Tronia's name with that of a thief (because she wants to "steal" Aron, get it?). But that's just my opinion.

This being your first game, I can understand if you're not ready to start branching yet, but I'd really like for the player to have the option of going with Tronia or staying to watch Elec at the bar. Actually, IIRC, didn't the player used to have the option in the gym for deciding whether Elec being hit upon or wearing more revealing clothes? Any way, it's cool if you're going for a linear experience.

At the end, when they leave the bar, the missing bouncer at the door was a bit of a downer, as I had been curious whether Tronia would tease the guy, give him her number and/or her panties, or something else; instead, nothing happened, and if that was your intention then it's cool.

I can't recall where, exactly, but there was a part when one of them mentions playing something, and I thought that was a great opportunity for a little self-publicity, maybe with a teaser for a future game? ;-P

Also, as a minor nitpick, although it's up to each player an estimate of how much time Aron and Tronia left Elec alone, it's a bit weird, maybe, that when they came back from their fun at the back (pun intended!), they found the missing girl in the backroom serving a rando and complaining that he didn't last long. In the next chapter, will there be another scene where Elec confesses to Aron everything she was up to? And what were her feelings for being left alone with a stranger back at the bar when they decided to have some fun? Between getting hot having some dude rub himself against her can be distracting, was she ok with her company just leaving like that? How deep you want to go with your game is entirely up to you, and I'm not really complaining, but there is a lot of room being left behind to further develop your characters. If you want to, that is. Frankly, I imagine most people who download the games with the Adult tag, are looking for a simpler, more graphic, experience, but to each their own.

As with my previous comment, this is just feedback from a player who's enjoying your game and is interested to see where it will go. No offence or disrespect is meant.

Cheers!

Great demo, took the two routes to try and the dom seems the most natural with the main plot and it gives the better rewards too.

The art's awesome, the dialogues and text are good too. The music is very generic, not sure if that's the best (or even a good) choice, honestly. The audio clip at near the end of the dom route seemed a bit lackluster, I expected the wife getting progressively more excited and hearing the dude's heavier and faster breathing, along with some whispered reinforcements and complements, but that's just me.

All in all, following as I'm interested in what will come of this project of yours.

Wow, I'm just totally bedazzled; from the description, I had a general idea, but in less than 5 minutes I was already gobsmacked. The dialogues and the MC's introspection, particularly, are incredibly deep. The talk between Dad and Desmond was soul-moving. The girls are all using one or more trope.

And the comedy! By the Nine Circles of Hell, that scene at the onsen with Ken and everybody else! The scene with Mallory in her room when her parents arrive! And the lingerie store!

The models are great, the lewd scenes quite tasty, but the story is just so amazing! If you ever feel a bit more adventurous, I'd say this game's story and plots and characters could help you a lot in writing a small series of books based on this. Just sayin'...

Tldr; this game is shaping up to be an amazing work of art!

Definitely fav'ing and following!

P.S.: The only part that I'm actually wary about is the ammount of characters; as you build the game towards the conclusion, it will inevitably become more difficult to manage exposure and revelation for all of them without leaving loose ends. Still and regardless, I wish you the best of luck!

Yo. This is off to a great start. Awesome art, nice story, don't get why the wife's a neko but sure why not. With your spoiler alert of NO NTR, I'm wondering how the hypno vid will contribute or not to that. I'm also curious how will you, the dev, express her undying love for a husband whose "tool" won't eventually be able to satisfy her sexually.

But I think that the best part will be to watch their journey into NTS, plenty of potential for a incredible roller-coaster of emotions.

Looking forward for the next updates!

Hey! Just posting to tell that I'm very impressed with this game! (FWIW)

Great art, the building-up for the MC, the prank at the end, not to mention the teases (including Oma...). Solid premise, really hope that this game reaches its milestones, both current and future!

Best of luck!

A good start. There's been a steady growth of NTR/NTS games in the last few months, which is definitely nice to play around with the concepts of trust and confidence, singular and plural.

Personally, I consider the "rework" to be a lot better overall than your first submission (no pun...). Having said that, if I were you, one of the first things I'd do would be to find a native english speaker to help with the text. The dialogues and narrative are comprehensible, but it's still a pain to actually read it, no offence meant.

Another point would be the MC: his face is quite yummy, but those glasses and hairstyle effeminates him, imo. Is it purposeful? If so, is that to undermine his masculinity and reinforce the sharing? Is that a plot for the future, as in the player makes the decision to keep his looks and turn the kink of netorase to netorare (NTS to NTR), or does the player trades the goggles and hairstyle for something more masculine (not butch), reinforcing Elec's love for him?

Another point is the colors: so much white and blue, with black a distant third. What about the rest of the spectrum, lol. Is there a reason for Aaron and Steve to be sharing the head hair and eye color (white and blue, respectivelly)? Young and fit juxtaposing older and thicker? Or is this a limit of the AI?

One nitpicking point: Elec mentions in the final scene in the bedroom being happy with meeting and being around so many new people, but as far as the player can tell there's only Steve and his younger clone (lol!), plus Tronia that comes along with the MC.

The next scenario will be the bar, with the couple plus Tronia and Steve; I'm eager to watch what will happen. I'm also wondering if you're going to give the player the option for the couple to go to another bar with Tronia and ditch Steve, in order to advance for either a threesome with Tronia or a "battle" between Tronia and Elec for who gets Aaron, or not. Just a thought I had (innocent smile).

Finnally, I'm not expecting any of the questions to be answered, I'm just sharing (no pun...) what was I thinking at those parts of the game. And I'm looking forward to see how will you develop this game.

Cheers!

Hi. +1 from me on how usefull your flowchart is, triple so because the player can use it to jump to the chat through it. It's a perfect in-game guide!

If I may make a suggestion, though, currently there are no indications or hints of how the player can access it, so I'd reccommend either a message informing the player when entering the chat, or a button maybe next to or on the other side of the picture of the girl the player is chatting with.

Looking forward for future updates!