Hello!<з
Thank you so plenty for your thoughts concluded and shared - indeed, there is lasting, delicate admission of process and learning laid furthermore, by gentle heart I'd thought of project as continuously developed - by one side or of other furthermore.
And - it is yet warm to hear that themes and setting came gentle to your fulfillment, there is variety of an extension to story coming, hopefully, onward. I'm looking forward softly, too, as well<з
Adored!<з
Apologies for such extended waiting - time was at loss, and yet!
Thank you so plenty! Both for the gentleness and for concluded words towards the prose - indeed, there is a long, extended disposition onward to smooth and ease it tenderly. By current moment, with the oncoming chapter both there is rewritten prologue - and edited chapter that was first, till further moment of a waiting<з
It is a delicate and gentle journey, within my hopes is to improve and possibly rewrite, consider new and edit chapters as they go - just as alike to current moment~
Thank you, mistful sun, ever so onward!<з
Thank you!<зз
"Went stale" (as in "boring", "uneventful" - in motion immovable, in purpose small, being uninteresting to quite their own self) pictured Archone going rigid and flat on their back after the sudden impact, but they are moreso ponder over sky, think about the encounter and prepare for the road back home rather than have any physical troubles~
In the same way Tenir took them upwards he sent them back down, just with lesser delicateness - no one is attempting at murder *yet* ;з
They're just resting on the snow and are very dramatic about it, please don't mind them o/////o
Thank you so much for sharing your thoughts!<з
Indeed, recently narration within the most-fluid lines was rewritten to come smoother and more delicate to read - along there might be further revisions towards it as development goes by, as well as eased softly language in the future chapters as they are~
But also, for a gentle notion - together with those current changes, some files in the game came also compressed additionally, reducing size of it notably, for further adding accessibility!<з
At the moment this short alpha includes two scenes and uses three of the five prepared backgrounds, a sprite of one character - and a number of details as the story progresses, which, when read, make the image quite dynamic (to the point that we tried to make each text screen contain a new element).
Other reworked sprites, backgrounds and reasoning were posted on our blog, but the alpha was posted a little earlier due to the difficult situation with the developer (we live in eastern Ukraine and, taking into account a number of difficulties, we decided that it was better to post the raw version than not to post it later at all).
The "Book of Tizian" comes immediately after the end of the "Story of the North", as was originally intended for the root. A brief description of the plot of the last book is contained in the prologue, and its beginning is comparable, like all other routes, with the meeting of the Archon and Tizian in the ruins of old Saugunt. The discrepancy is that if in the first book the scene ends with Titian recognizing his soul mate in the hidden mask of the Archon, and this does not happen in his personal route and he suffocates them. There are three scenes in the new book - a prologue, a scene where the Archon loses consciousness, and their vision of their current and future, bestowed by Cybelle. Everything about this place is pretty arthouse o///o
I would like to think that the point is not in translation, but in the style of narration in general - speaking shortly, this is a stream of consciousness and a weighty centering goes to the unreliability of the narrator (the main character is a possessed undead, their psyche and formulations are different from human ones and all their perception and interpretation is built on a very overflowing and flowery speech, rich in primordial and achthonic colors).
The Archon is a complex character, even by the standards of Secunda as a whole, they are meant to be a delicious twist on playing a dark fantasy, arch-historical villain. They cannot be described in one single, concretized way that could be applied to every scene and every route, their nature is fluid and full of different tones. The prism of their reality is the main weight both in the narrative and in history as a whole, and to simplify the construction of their characterization, reducing it to archetypal and easily described concepts, would be harmful to the book, in general and in particular. The Archon is conceived as a character who will constantly ask questions about their identity, gender and natural, about their personal and surrounding motives, about the structure of their thinking and inner world, and, in addition, about the reality and order of situations that they find themselves in, too o----o
Hii! This is a bit of a complex question o---o
In both books, the gender of the main character has no bearing on playthroughs. The Archon is always referred to as "they" and only by a neutral title, and the answer to the gender at the beginning of the game only matters for that single scene exclusively (with the special consideration that it is about the birth of the archon and throughout the story it is implied that their gender, and any fact of self-identification is fluid).
In part, the inclusion of gender could have made the scenes feel more personal and immersive, but on the other hand, it also cuts down on the character and gameplay of the romance in this open, fluid form. The Secunda is androgynous, genderfluid and queer by default, and we try to leave out details in the story that could not be interpreted otherwise later. Still, any of your original character can be of any gender or presentation, this is an artistic interpretation for personal use and desire of everyone, all together and separately<з
Greetings!! Thank you so much for your comment!
In fact, I find it very difficult to answer your question - the possibilities and knowledge about imports are now very limited, and the situation largely depends on how significant the project will be in order for further work to be reasonable and expedient.
We really hope that the situation can be resolved and the novel will be imported to other platforms - but, currently, at the moment the question is holded.
Hello!!
Indeed, english is not my first language (and not second one either), and I sensibly realize that in addition to the fact that I often have banal typos and difficulties with the selection of words and exact expressions I can also make mistakes even in the very construction of a sentence and their logical chain as a whole, relying on my personal feelings and sense of shades of the language, and not on how it should actually work, so thank you very much for the review - I will try to be more attentive in the future;)
I am also aware that my writing style (the stream of consciousness to a greater extent), in some places includes very confusing, long and too saturated with epithets and phrases of sentences, which in themselves can be difficult to comprehend without the necessary immersion and addiction to the tones. For example, the prologue itself is very rich in artistic techniques and a complex storytelling style - I really hoped that this would help to delve into the fantasy and gloom of the story, make you feel and get an impression of it as a legend in a forgotten language, or a medieval ballad.
Thus, for example, the situation with "and" - this technique is called anaphora, lexical repetition, and I often deliberately use it when I try to add a sense of cyclicality to a sentence so that speech seems lively and mobile, with an enhanced impression and preparation, and not flat and gray, with a linear movement of thought and speech.
Sometimes repetitive words help to separate a long sentence, like a breath of air, sometimes - as I said, to add a sense of flow, cyclicality, to enhance the finished effect. Sometimes these aspects are successful and help the story to unfold in bright and unusual colors, and sometimes they are not, in which case I need to rethink them in order to make the speech more accessible and accurate in terms of expression and narrative line.
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Thank you so much for such sweet words!
The next update is planned to be more voluminous about world and characters, and I hope you will find something special in this story~~
If you are interested, you can find out the news about the project and even ask questions, if you like, on my tumblr page;зз
Thank you so much again and have a very nice day!
It is a great joy for me that you have found something special in this novel! Thank you so much for the kind words - my morning with them became a thousand times more filled with pleasure~~
And I am very grateful that you told me about the bug - everything is already fixed, but I think the solution will only be downloaded with the next update. Work on the project is still going on, of course, and I hope that soon you will see a continuation;) If you are interested, you can write me an ask in the tumblr - I will describe all the options of that line, or, if you like, I will tell you in personal message specifically about hugs;з
Thank you so, so much;*
Wish you a very best day ~
