Okay, I think you're a great writer in a lot of regards and yeah I think taking time away from this game to use that writing skill is a great idea. I still have a lot of gripes with the story you've laid out though.
Standing as is your mc has little choice in the world. You literally get raped twice? Three times? And can't do much but accept it. Sure you can go the other route and be a complete slut in this game but literally being a whore is how you get stronger story wise
Cool if that's the game we're going for I get it. But it's odd that I can be forced into sex, choose to have sex with Gramps then be buddy buddy with everyone less than 10 mins later.
The railroad end. The moment we start the heist we immediately lose agency there's no real options to be selected. It's just the story and only the story. Sure we get to explore this big sanctuary but that's both the same as it's mostly a scavenger hunt. Once again you're a great writer but the whole thing just seems out of place it's irksome that even the final choice isn't our own. Iconic sure, enjoyable once you know the alternative? No
Finally, I don't think you intended to see MC out the way you did. Seriously, with all the build up traveling the city and everything it all feels counterintuitive. We have to fuck the shark dude to get a boat for example. Idk that's just my observation. I wish you luck and love on your next projects don't take any of these criticisms to heart I love this game It's why I feel the need to draw attention to my personal pain points with it.
Thank you for your time.