Nice start :) hope you stick with it. Just a small critique: The amount of skin color choices is out of this world lol. Most people are not going to look up each term to see what color it is. I understand you are trying to be inclusive, but, bruh lol. Maybe get the primary tones (black, tan, white) and then give those tones a light, mid, and dark value for each. That right there is already 12, and even that might be too much, but it cuts down half your choices and is still incisive to all shades.
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This is so good!! Just one little thing to point out:
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MC finds his parent's room and runs into the king who has killed them. I chose the option where he finds a sword and stands up to the king stating that he has killed his family. Once Lancelot steps in and saves him, MC asks him if his parent's death is like an illness and if they will stop being dead at some point.
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I find this naivety weird because MC just pointed out that they lost people to killing implying they understand the concept of death. I recommend changing this if they are intended to be naive (which is understandable since they are a young child at this point in time).