Very interested in seeing where this goes. My one piece of constructive criticism would be that the transition between POVs is very abrupt and disorienting.
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Loving this so far, can't wait for more.
As a recovering alcoholic myself, I appreciate seeing the representation in Grey. Considering that he starts drinking again in this game (at least in some routes), I hope to see some of the consequences of that get explored a bit more.
Hiro's Japanese feels very google translate in a lot of places, but that's a less pressing concern considering most readers aren't fluent. Nevertheless, very eager to see more of Hiro's story in future updates