Like your version much more than the original one from Hot Pink since yours has more gameplay, but...

1. Getting seen seems unavoidable. You can only avoid it when grabbing girls but girls leaving the locker will almost always be seen. So a game over is inevitable which sucks.

2. Would be good to know what the different tentacle options actually do.

3. Hitting space doesn't always react.

I agree with herbstpoet:

If there was a little more info on what all the different tentacle types do, it would be really helpful.

About the other one:

You almost always get caught anyway, because the girls who come out of the lockers "betray" you.

At some point it's just annoying when you don't really get anywhere because you get caught.