Congratulations!

I had a brief look at this on mobile but unfortunately it's rendering in landscape mode (Itch requires that you select landscape or portrait).

Please see steps 9E, 9F, 9G at the following link to see how to configure this:

https://itch.io/jam/cavejam/topic/543846/tutorial-uploading-your-adventuron-game-to-itch

Another point is that the intro text might be better using the : stagger command instead of the : print command. This is just like a print but it controls the flow of text paragraph by paragraph so that the text doesn't flow off the screen and it focuses the player on seeing content one chunk at a time. Good to test on mobile.

I'll take a bit more of a look at the game itself a bit later. Kind of busy on responding to various issues today.

Flipping heck! This game is huge! :) I've just found a brand new section of locations!

Hmmm... repair staff? Fix staff? Insert stone? mend staff? attach stone? 

I'm struggling for the correct words, I think?

Just realised that I've been extremely thick regarding a source of metal. 

Regarding the handle... You need it to get something from outside... but you could have potentially burnt it by then? 

Right... I've found BAD END 2 now... How do I get a good ending, I wonder? 

Probably need to add CHOP WOOD / CUT WOOD as a synonym for GET WOOD.

Well done to me! And well done to Pixel man77... What a great little game. Some really clever puzzles. It just needs a bit of work to add a few extra responses to make it a tiny bit more user-friendly. Adding a few more responses to flag up some of the red herrings would really help. Do the crystal and rock serve any purpose in the end?

But... yeah, I really enjoyed that. For a first effort with Adventuron (and at an adventure too?) it's great.

I updated the game. The changes are:

-i fixed the bugs 8bitAG mentioned

-added a new secret ending

-fixed most of the language errors using a software but there may be some left

However the crystal bug is still there which im going to open a topic for

Hi Pixelman. Im playing your game at the moment and really enjoying it. I have a long list of corrections/suggestions. Is there a good way to send these to you, as there's too many to post here? It's mostly spelling, grammar, punctuation errors and suggestions for new verbs or synonyms to avoid guess-the-verb scenarios.

In the meantime, I think I need a hint. I've given the staff to the wizard, but he still needs the wizard stone (or whatever it's called). I think I can get it from the riddlemaker, but he requires two similar objects. I thought it was the rock and the crystal, but that didn't work. Any hints on the two things I need?

Hello, I don't have much time to play the game (yet) unfortunately,

Some feedback:

• I don't think that the style of your graphics require the use of the CRT filter.
• Maybe in the intro screen, colour the word MAP as a brighter colour? 
• In the intro screen, please place periods / full stops at the end of sentences, and start each sentence with a capital letter.
• Generally speaking, please place full stops / periods at the end of sentences.

The Trunk:

I think the following input should be responded to:

• CHOP TREE

The Oldman:

I'll just list some inputs that I think should be responded to:

• SAY HELLO
• EXAMINE MAN
• TALK MAN

: match "say hello;talk man;talk oldman" {
}

Also, please place paragraph breaks in the middle of paragraphs. A paragraph break is the \n character. For long bits of text, please use the stagger command to make sure that the text flows well on mobile (stagger is the same as print but it inserts a press_any_key automatically between paragraphs.

: stagger "This is paragraph 1.\nThis is paragraph 2.";

Talking to the oldman again should give you the hint again about smelling the fish. I missed that detail the first time I talked to him, so I suggest repeating his dialog the second time, but only create the fishing rod the first time.

Please name your objects in the following format (the comment is there for information only, it doesn't change anything.:

fishing_rod : object "a fishing rod"; /* fishing = adjective, rod = noun */

If you name your objects this way all of the following is accepted by adventuron:

• get rod
• get fishing rod

The match item is in the format : match "VERB NOUN", so you only need to say : match : "examine rod" and the adjective will be mostly ignored.

The Troll:

• EXAMINE TROLL
• TALK TROLL

.. that's all for now. Good luck in the jam.

I finished it.

Have you ever heard of Andrew Plotkin's cruelty scale for adventures? This is a measure of how cruel an adventure is from the point-of-view of things like sudden-death and getting into an unwinnable state. The classic scale has five ratings: Merciful, Polite, Tough, Nasty and Cruel, with Cruel being the worst. I would rate your game as Cruel, as there are several ways to die without warning and it is possible to get into an unwinnable state without even knowing that you're in an unwinnable state. In Gareth's era, this was probably the norm, so he would think this is okay. In the modern era, this is unacceptable and your reviewers would give you a real bagging. In fact, I think most players would just give up very early and move onto something else, as there's about 10,000 adventures to choose from. This is a pity, as the game has some nice puzzles. It just needs a little more fine tuning. It appears that the rock, crystal and pickaxe are essentially red herrings.

It's getting late now, so I'll try to send you some more helpful comments tomorrow, as promised, although Adventuron has already mentioned some of the major issues that I was going to mention.

For a further details on Andrew Plotkin's cruelty scale, see: http://www.ifwiki.org/index.php/Cruelty_scale.