This is a very fun entry. It shows a quirky sense of humor and the ability to create dramatic tension through narrative events. You also have a firm grasp of the absurd. Have you read any Douglas Adams? I think if you put a little bit more work into not losing the reader with your quick shifts, you can do some exciting game (or other) writing.

This story reminds me that I have still Glasgow in my “to-visit” list. I hope I don’t finish in Ecuador too.