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Fires of Velnor's itch.io pageResults
| Criteria | Rank | Score* | Raw Score |
| Adherence to Theme | #9 | 3.805 | 3.880 |
| Overall | #39 | 3.386 | 3.453 |
| Flow & Clarity | #47 | 3.020 | 3.080 |
| Concepts & Originality | #52 | 3.334 | 3.400 |
Ranked from 25 ratings. Score is adjusted from raw score by the median number of ratings per game in the jam.
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I really liked this story, and the description of the "event" and the inner dialogue was really captivating; couldn't be clearer adherence to the theme! I did find the beginning a little underwhelming as I couldn't visualise the world, but as soon as we entered the town...good job.
Thanks for the feedback. I do wish I did a little bit more for the introduction. I had an idea of making the start seem more like a mission log but I see that I could probably write it in a better way.
Great job capturing the theme of consequences in such a vivid and personal way. The emotional depth of the protagonist adds a compelling layer to the narrative.
Thanks, I'm glad you enjoyed it :)
Powerful imagery in this one, hits hard
Thank you <3
The story was clear and flowed well but I like to see more complex characters. That is hard to do in a short story though.
Yeah I definitely agree. I wish I had enough words to make the characters more complex in the story. I guess it will be a good challenge for the next Jam ;)