I see that you put a lot of effort into this and the game has certainly  improved from the previous version but it can still be polished. It's okay for an adventure story game but making choices meaningful and adding more gameplay elements can make this game even better. Good job so far!

My feedback hasn't changed much from the last time you submitted this.

You have added more mouse-maze gameplay at the end. But it does take quite a while to get to it. You still have to sit through a lot of "next, next, next" in the beginning. It would be more interesting if the player had some control over what actually happens. 

You've got a strong theme and story to work from. I would suggest cutting back on some of the boring parts, and focus on the interactive gameplay elements. Give the player meaningful choices to make, and more challenging tasks to complete. 

Comparing this to your previous submission on the March Jam, I think a lot of improvements were made on this game and overall the story is more expansive than ever! Great Job!

Theme - 5/5

Aesthetic - 4/5

Comedy - 1/5

Gameplay - 3/5

Story - 3/5

You have made great progress with this since the last Jam. Well done! The 'Up & Down' squares for the ranger maze were a little too fast for me, so I stopped there after quite a few failures! Hope I didn't miss too much.

Is there a reason why you didn't / couldn't embed the font so it would not have to be downloaded? Just in case you are unaware, you can usually embed it via: File > Options > Save > Check 'Embed fonts in the file' (at the bottom of the box).