“A special thanks to NalumTei. Your assistance with editing and proofreading was both encouraging and helpful. I am forever thankful.”
Thanks to you for being an inspiration. The zine’s name is truly Alone Together :)
I am always waiting for the end of the month to read the new issue and I share it with the Spanish Telegram group. Keep up with the good work, you are not alone :)
This issue’s proofreading:
Page 4: Four Against Darkness’ section: “Bored and just wanting to blow of some steam?” should be “blow off”.
The Dungeon Dive’ section: “Reviews are well-thought out” should be “well-thought-out” or “well thought out”: https://dictionary.cambridge.org/es/diccionario/ingles/well-thought-out
DNDCharacter.com’ section: “proclemation” should be “proclamation”.
“Maybe Im just easily impressed,” should be “I’m” or “I am”.
Page 5’s last line “Of course, one cant mention pbp without discussing its accessbility.” should be “can’t” and “accessibility”.
Page 8: “But what if we didnt have to rely
on a third party for…” should be “didn’t”.
“But are loads of d100 tables needed for everything? I would argue, no, they arent” should be “aren’t”.
“… but also notice that constantly flipping to and fro between my journal…” should be “from”.
“The challenge. The next time…” might be “The challenge: the next time…”
Page 11: “Players have loads of options, kit, and tactics to choose from…” might be “kits”, in plural.
“A word of advice. Bring some allies or NPC’s.” might be “A word of advice: bring some allies or NPC’s.”
Page 12: Review If Looks Could Kill. “Players take on the role of hire hands sent to… should be “hired hands”
Page 13: layout’ section: “… but sometimes feels like a lot of of information per page…” should be “a lot of information”
Page 15: “ Layout (+++)” seems to have one blank character before the word because it is not aligned with its paragraph below.
Does it solo?’ Section: “Make sure to get your d20's warmed up and a small band of misfts ready to…” should be “misfits”.
Page 18: “Key 3: Meet your accuser” seems to have more blank spaces after the colon than “Key 2:”.
Page 22: “A sickly voice make you look up.” should be “makes”
Recommendations:
Regarding solo play and pbp: there is a game for two players called Tether which you might find interesting: https://adambaffoni.itch.io/tether
Check out Fast Fantasy and its three Adventure Starters in the last three pages: https://bassbuilt.itch.io/fast-fantasy-tabletop-rpg
Take a look into the gane The Lantern: https://blind-archivist.itch.io/the-lantern
Thank you again!