First off, I love this art style. Simple and clean, I think it does wonders. Also custom BGs to go along with custom sprites. Very nice.
I'm not sure if I understood the conflict though. It jumped me out of nowhere and left me more than a little confused. I think this may have to do with excessive sentence structure: it packs a lot of phrases into one thing, and that hurts readability.
The poetry was a little jarring at first, but I now I think it worked well and added a nice bit of contrast.
Looking forward to see where you take this in the future!