Hey, sorry it took so long to get back to you--been super busy!
So I think the first thing is that there's a lot of information and I think it would be better laid out with properly formatted headers. Some paragraphs also jump off the line, like Allure and Wit on page 3, which can look very disorienting.
Like I said, there is a lot of substance to this, and I honestly think you would be better served dividing your core concepts into proper chapters so we can pace ourselves instead of having one concept follow another immediately.
While there are some grammatical and spelling errors, those are fixable in the long run and honestly I would first focus on getting it into a nice readable state by focusing on layout. That's my two cents for now--please let me know if you have any questions!