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Theme: Expansion of the business and the physical form. Very evident. Yay!

Story: Enjoyable quick romp, equal parts romance and business, with a hint of living up to expectations.  The porny fakeout on the second day was perhaps too obvious that it wasn't porn, by merit of where it fell in the narrative. I wonder if it would have felt more effective if it was on the third day, where they'd gotten even further closer still. 

Enjoyed the classic Ghost-esque donut sculpting scene. A classic setup.

You know what you're setting out to do, and you follow that to the natural conclusion, a fun one at that. I didn't test for making things worse, but who wants to. That's not as funny.

His expansion rate is a bit unbelievable, as it the fact he started off that skinny, but I can quickly look past those given they were your means of implementing the theme in part.

Overall enjoyable quick smutty romp though!

Presentation: The arms on the non-expanded sprite feel out of place, which makes sense, as they tie in the most at the largest frame. I think it would have been nicer if they started off smaller. The head also felt maybe a bit too small for the sprite at the end, but that may just be me (who is not an artist).

The music for the smut scene felt a bit out of place (and didn't start immediately), and I was a bit gutted we didn't see the backside, although I was pleased with the cg you put together. I also may have wanted one more view of the foodtruck, facing out the customers, if only to mix it up a little, but that wasn't a major thing.

Creativity: In a way you went outside of the box against the majority of this jam by directly embracing the theme in a more literal sense, while also tying it into a more figurative sense.

Overall thoughts: Enjoyable, sweet, cute art! No major gripes. Well done!

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Thanks for the detailed thoughts! This is the first time anyone on the team has worked on a VN, so it’s good to get detailed feedback about what worked and what didn’t.  

The fakeout on the second day was, perhaps, not ideal… but the process of making and filling jam donuts lent itself so well to one and there wasn’t any other place in the three days where it could really fit in. I probably should have cut it, but when a hole needs to be filled with sticky goo it’s hard not to make at least some sex comparisons.

Hehehe. I didn't hate it, I was just like "this is a very obvious fakeout moment".