So, for the story itself, I can't really judge it because it's an introduction that absolutely needs a follow-up to be complete. However, I liked the general gloomy ambiance you gave to your VN, and your use of a variety of visuals to help convey the elements of the story. It's also interesting to follow a character who may not be 100% good, or at least who is on a path of vengeance. The only cataclysmic decision was to make Anselmo drink directly from a bottle of cider. I consider that an offence and shall declare war on you. But yeah, for what you managed to write, I think it's a good start and I'll wait for the rest of it!