It's ambitious. I'll give it that.
I do think, under the circumstances, it was a great attempt at creating a fantasy world with such a small word count. Also the extra animation work and sprite alternates were well appreciated. Not enough VNs put in the effort to do those things and they really help give the game its own personality imo.
That said, the story moves at a mile a minute. So many things happen one after another that I never had a chance to settle into this world that you are trying to build. Further, because the pacing is so fast, there is quite a bit of telling going on, and that hurts the narrative voice.
It's an interesting entry and one that I think could have been made a lot better if the Jam allowed you more time to polish things. Am interested to see what becomes of this in the future.