Well slap me on the arse and toss me in the Tiber, that was excellent!
I gotta be honest, I wasn't sure about this at first. It felt like the narrative interjections were a bit too intrusive in the first couple scenes, and I just about rolled my eyes at the mention of werewolves.
But the atmosphere! The atmosphere! Fantastic. It won me over with the music and the CGs. Packaging is everything, and this was packaged beautifully. And I think that once the story got going, the writing smoothed out and flowed very well.
This was a great read, and I'm so glad you stayed up till 5am to submit it! Can't wait to see what becomes of this in the future!