Hm, started it out of curiosity but see rigth off the bat grammar errors which pretty much immediately throw me into a rage. Ive seen far far too many things with constant grammar issues that i can no longer ignore them. I highly suggest you look into someone who has the time and talent to go through and fix any and all grammar issues from here on out as it would make it nicer and easier to read for everybody. Guess ill find out how bad it is as i go on. I do notice many ladies are clearly bsed on animy characters.
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Since version 0.3, we have had a proofreader (BirdmanGA). It is a visual novel, so grammar is one of the most important aspects. We care a lot about it. Sometimes things slip through, but that is why it is still in early access, and we have special channels on Discord to report any grammar or typo issues.
You need to redo the intro and get a new guy then. There are 20-30 mistakes in the intro alone. It only got worse from there, lines are frequently missing punctuation, misgendering not only the main character but also others(there is literally only two guys why are some of the girls being referred to as he? and why is the MC referred to as a she?), the dialog box also has the wrong name for when a character is speaking multiple times, and finally the MC's thoughts are frequently not marked in () when they should be.