The last one I read of your trilogy, I won't beat a dead horse with mentioning narration, but it was definitely... a wild ride! Very silly and strange, and I'm sorry if that's not what you were going for, but it was pretty funny (*=w=) The music was also very... club-like? And I had a little giggle with that too :3c
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I was definitely going for the most outlandish, bad story I could think of:
- Waking up with amnesia as a furry, probably the single most overused trope for any furry vn.
-Alex Jones level conspiracies as fact.
-The most cringe sex scene imaginable, since people say they don't care about the story in porn.
-Changing genres in the middle of the story.
-Misleading cover art.
-Overused groan-inducing one liners.
-Sprite clipping
I wanted to make it as B- movie as I could, while still having a semblance of plot in there. To be honest, I wrote part one with no idea how to tackle the second half, and decided to treat part two as how to even begin to explain the crazy world I constructed.
I hoped to make it so bad it would almost be good, but I think it was a swing and a miss. I haven't really written anything since before the game jam in over 20 years other than the other vn I posted at the beginning of the month, and I wanted to go as far outside of my comfort zone as possible.
Don't worry, I've now got the message loud and clear about adding narration. I had received a bad grade on a writing assignment years ago because the teacher thought I used it too much, and it just always stuck with me.
I tend to take things a bit too seriously sometimes. I also miss things right in front of me at others. I can't tell you how many fvns I've read, and never really considered HOW they were written. I knew even at the time I was being too explanatory on the plot, but couldn't figure out how to handle it without a narrator, though in this story, I didn't care as much because being bad was the point.
This was the main reason I wanted to enter the game jam, to learn the basics, try new things, and find out where I need to improve. I literally never touched Ren'py until the second week, so I was just trying to learn as I went along. I didn't want to wait another year to get started, so I just jumped in to see what I could do. My focus was more on the technical aspects and less on the story part, to their detriment, but I feel much more prepared if there is a next time.