Finished the whole thing, gonna give my thoughts in a minute, but before that, as the guy who made the Ninisanni Scenario 1 guide (which btw, don't ask me where it is anymore bc I legit have NO idea), figured I should do a little something for people struggling with completeing the to-do list:
THE GUIDE PART:
Enter A Fashion Show: Buy the sewing kit and fashionable cloth in the sewing shop, then go to Reimu on Friday evening
Go To An Amusement Park: Go to Petra on Tuesday evening, and let her get her haircut
Hit Up Comiket: Go to Petra on Tuesday evening, but let her style you
Visit A Haunted House: Unlocks once you're done with the introduction scene
Hit Up The Beach: Do Elira's fetish play
Get A Job: Unlocks once you're hired by either Zaion or Scarle
Get A Tan: Go to Elira on Friday evening
Put On A Puppet Show: Go to Finana on Monday evening
Attend An Opera: Buy the car, then go to Enna on Wednesday evening
Go Dancing: Go to Nina on Monday evening
Play Tabletop Games: Either go to Aia on Sunday evening (can't happen on your first run) or buy a starter deck and go to Rosemi on Wednesday evening
Win A Fight Against Selen: Go to Selen on Monday evening, then pick "Get close and grab her to stop the facial abuse.", "Defensive kick." and "Brace with a foot."
Learn To Drive: Buy the car, then go to Millie on Tuesday evening
Play Tennis: Get Maria, then go to her on Wednesday evening
Go Hunting: Go to Rosemi on Friday evening and pick "I wanna shoot groundhogs with guns. Blood will run through the tunnels, rodents will fear the name Ryugu."
Do A Test Of Courage: Go to Reimu on Tuesday evening
See A Firework Show: Do the Ethyria ending
Go To A Festival: Do the Ethyria ending
Cool Off In The Library: Go to Selen on Thursday evening
Put On A Massive Blockparty: Do the Obsydia ending
Chill Around A Bonfire: Do the Lazulight ending
Go To An Idol Concert: Do the Lazulight ending
Seduce Ms. Lanza: Get hired by Zaion, go to Zaion on Monday afternoon, then go talk to Zaion in the backroom on Friday afternoon, then go to Zaion again on Friday evening
Find A Cure For My Illness: Once you crossed "Seduce Ms. Lanza" off your to-do list, do her fetish play
Actually Do Leg Day: Go to Rosemi on Thursday evening
Go To The Aquarium: Go to Petra on Friday evening
Watch More Anime: Go to Petra on Monday evening, then go to Hot Topic
Try Volunteering: Go to Millie on Thursday evening
Find Pomu: Cross "Hit Up Comiket" and "Get A Tan" off your to-do list, and go to Selen on Sunday evening and pick "Watch the kid count with Selen". Once this is all done, a scene will trigger later if you're working for Scarle, otherwise just get hired by Scarle on your next run
Seduce Pomurin: Get hired by Scarle, unlocks once you fuck Pomurin
?????????: Once you crossed "Find Pomu" and "Find A Cure For My Illness" off your to-do list, a Pomu image will appear at the fountain when you usually get to pick which ending to get for this run. Click it.
THE REVIEW(ish) PART:
As someone who has been following your stuff since Tower of Gloom and The Show Must Go On somehow, watching your evolution unfold has been SO rewarding, the chaacter writing is really fleshed out, the humor lands well, and the amount of content is insane! The cinematic aspect of your work really shows once again, and I really like the little gimmicks and things added on top of what made Ninisanni 1 good!
The dynamic between MC and the girls from 1 for one is really cool, love your take of the harem setting to make it something more believeable, and the scenes they have really double down on their personalities and what you did with them in this Ninisanni world (I especially like the fetish play scenes, surprisingly enough for someone hesitant on sex scenes in general, as they all feel pretty cute and have some of the best characterization in the whole VN imo) however I do feel like the new characters have very variable screen time (just compare the amount of Maria scenes to the amount of Aia scenes, for instance), but I don't really mind that much tbh, because what we did get is already pretty cool.
The mall setting and the idea of roaming around to pick your scene for the day is a good enough idea, but I do feel like it gets a bit repetitive at some point, when you only have a few things left to do, and it takes a while to find your marks in it at the start. The added shops are also a cool opportunity for completionists to have some more time to waste, and while I'm not the biggest fan of the whole Maria dress-up game (maybe it feels too disorganized to be able to put everything on her, or maybe the clothes just don't appeal to me? idk), but even then, I can just ignore it entirely if I want, so it's not that much of a big deal.
I'm really curious to see where you're going to go from here, as I assume you won't do any Niji stuff anymore. Anything original or are you going to write fan-VNs? (if you don't know yet or want to take a break, that's also understandable, so don't worry!)
Regardless, this comment is already long enough as it is, so just want to end by saying that I really appreciate seeing your growth as a writer and a dev overall, soooo see you next VN I guess! ^^
Oh also, I just remembered that there was some bugs and typos I met at some point, so here they are (people reading this out of curiosity, go away, I have no more actual things to say, also SPOILER WARNING FOR THE WHOLE VN):
This one happened when going to the Rose farm:
While running game code:
File "game/chapters/r/r Farmgirl.rpy", line 955, in script
if RoseLegend:
File "game/chapters/r/r Farmgirl.rpy", line 955, in <module>
if RoseLegend:
NameError: name 'RoseLegend' is not defined
Those are the only 2 bugs I found, rest are typos (some of them might be inside jokes I don't get tho, been a while since I got invested in Niji):
Now me, I have most of my assets invested in real esate (should be "estate"), because real estate always goes up. It's an immutable law.
Internally, I curse. My plan is failing in it's (should be "its") preemptive stages.
Does this Nina... hate you? Because the stuff she's writing... There's no way I'm hiring you after reading this shit. If even if (should be "If even") half of it is true...
Enna kicks off her shoes Then (either "Then" shouldn't be capitalized, or a period is missing before it) she pulls off her athletic socks with her toes, discarding them haphazardly in swinging kicks across the kitchen floor.
It's not my FAULT! These bitches suck at voting! Half of them don't even speak english!("english" should be capitalized)
With her hands, Kotoka connects Meloco and I's genitals. I slide into the dumb plump cunt. Kotoka for her part, slides a slopping wet tongue along her good friends (should be "friend's") clitoris.
Wait, he does? I thought he didn't like me. Every time I join you for weekened (should be "weekend") dinner he's always tutting.
Her voice is high pitched, unlike her usual deeper cadance. (should be "cadence")
Send it's (should be "its") regards?! What's that supposed to mean? If you want to show your regards, you send a letter!
Did you just give Selen Tatsuki alcohol? You know that's a danerous (should be "dangerous) combination, right? She's probably gonna drink it and hurt people!
But in any case, you've got me on your mind cause I'm so dashingly handsome, but you're (shoud be "your") virginal shoujo mind is telling you I'm scum so basically you want to get one over on me while also seeking out reasons to be around me.
Okay, the (I'm assuming it should be "then"?) what's our word?
Correct. But could you see (a) kid wearing it?
Hm. I wonder if its (should be "it's) tied to your illness?
I walk over and squat. Slowly, I lift the hemline. It's a short path to those patterned panties I know and love, but when I flip Millie (should be "Millie's") skirt... I see her taco.
Millie tears at the buttons in her shirt, ripping it apart like superman. ("superman" should be capitalized)
Hey now, isn't horny is ("is" isn't necessary) a dirty word!?
There would be more librarians (if) they didn't require a four year degree.
But as he looks around, there's nobody to cry too (should be "to"). So he wipes his tears and continues over to the paper construction crafts.
Mu (should be "my") elegant assassin lifts her head.
B-but won't that be weird? I mean, we're roommmates (should have 2 Ms, not 3). I don't wanna make things weird.
Pomurin tries to keep her eyes on my eyes, but she's fading the ("the" isn't needed) from the multiplicative orgasms still taking effect.
They didn't know what the (should be "they") brought on the world... (This is when Petra is sick)
We reach the farm house through a steeped dirt driveway only to park in the grass. To the back is (a) vineyard of roses in all colors and stripes.
Mister Ryuugu (should be "Ryugu"), do you take Miss Endou to be your wife, and forever hold, um, in perpetuity?
Irrespective of whether Selen bakes grass to a Snoop Dog (should be "Snoop Dogg") extent, Selen usually has this fermenting in her throat. It's dragon ash.
I beeline towards (the) barred gate. We stare at each other like respective prisoners. (can't remember which Zaion even this is, but it's one of them)
She closes her eyes nodding. (Nothing wrong with the line, but it's said by Reimu while it should be narration, it's on the zombie invasion scene)
Nah, you're (should be "your") competition's all over (This is while playing cards with Rosemi and Pomura)
Hold on, I can cite my sources! Look at ancient egypt! ("egypt" should be capitalized)
Quite (should be "quit") joking around! You don't have to be a tough guy who keeps to himself all the time, you know? Especially when it's hurting you...
You are the most jaded person I've ever met. If you were a color it would be dirty green. You have so much cycnical (should be "cynical") weight against the world, it's impossible that your heart capacitors has (should be "have") lasted so long.
That's part of it, isn't it? People love pickles. Japanese people love pickles. Getting in pickles, sucking on pickles,and (missing a space after the comma) even munching on them as they try and cradle their beer while waiting in this long, but ever shortening line.
Yes, because that kitchen knife is alse (should be "also") folded a thousand times.
Every blackguard has a past, [PLAYERNAME]. You wouldn't understand. I try to (do) good, but I'm haunted by-
Judgement free? You sound like (a) beta bitch. You sound like a bootlicker. You sound like a pussy. You sound like-
Go Ryuugu! (should be "Ryugu") Yeah~! You can do it!
Riku stands on bended knee. (should be either "a bended knee" or "bended knees")
Anywho, why I ("I" is unneeded) don't you get closer? Like you were.
It might be overkill, but songbird's (should be "songbirds") never come at your beckoning. You have to bait them into thinking coming is what they want to do.
When I wake up, the hall is empty. I had (a) pretty pleasant dream though. Enna had turned into a dog and we played fetch, I gave her belly rubs, and we routed some grouse.
Oh, don't tell me you never seen (either "you never saw" or "you've never seen" works) La Boheme.
She blinks. The (should be "Then") just grins and continues punching me. (This is in Selen's fetish play, so is the one afterwards)
I've- I can do you (should be "your") fetish shit or whatever.
But I think it's (an) alright outfit too. Still, maybe too conventional?
Not yet... I was talking (to) Midori on the phone. But I'm all done, so you can use the dial-up now~
And Maria makes a bubble beard and we design a fortress for Sir Laharal (should be "Laharl"), and I cannonball in to disrupt the bubbles, and then bathtime is officially ruined as I've somehow slip my ankle and bump my head.
They overstimulate and fry your coochie nerves and erode your cerebral cortex from the sheer amount of dopamine uptake! I sadly had a n (no space, "an" is fine) aunt who passed away from it...
I dunno. I just work here(.) (Also this is in Elira's tan event)
You know you can't do that to people, right? I mean, I don't even know you. What would you (should be "your") father think? (This is in the scene when Pomura gives you Pomuleaf)
She continues down the main strip (should be "street"). Just where is she headed? (This is when stalking Enna, so is the next one)
What are (you) doing here? You shouldn't be here.
The (should be "then") suddenly, a full grown dog barrels down the hallway. It's loose, a full grown Borzoi wolfhunter, teeth sharp enough to humble pitbulls.
In spite of all the glares, I see someone (I) recognize. (This is when Millie avoids you, so are the 2 next ones)
Oh, hey Millie! Millie, over there! Millie! (The line is said by Millie, but it should be said by MC)
I run up to her. She swirls in surprise, as I slap the basketball loose of it's (should be "its") nettings. It drops to the ground, and I kick it over to her.
Our conversation continues while Nina's eyes flick back and forth. Time to be a good extrovert (and) bring her back in.
But we we're (should be "were") going to do the hypnosis fetish, onii-chan! Not whatever the hell that was!!
And the (should be "then") she leaves the room. (This is also during Finana's fetish play)
Even with three vials... Assuming the solution is ("is" isn't necessary) takes seven steps, that's three to the seventh power. Roughly two thousand two hundred different possible move combinations.
That part about a girlfriend was a lie. I mean, I have a girl that calls me her boifwi, but I'm not sure that means were (should be "we're) together...
But for some reason, I understand what your girlfriend's (should be "girlfriends") see in you. I like you, yes, I think that's true. Yeah.
Oh. Oh... You're (should be "your") skin is bleeding. You're bleeding. A lot. (This is when you're trapped in bushes in the Rose farm, next line is in Rose farm too)
That's it's (should be "its") job! And that's not a good reason to end something's life!!
Okay, sweet. I was thinking about it a lot, and I'm gonna be playing as the googly eye fish guy with the helmet. That's the Ryuguu (should be "Ryugu") family mascot, you know. And even though XO patchwork bear speaks to me, you gotta represent, you know?
Boys! Swarm the bad guys! Girls! Protect me with you (should be "your") life!
I'm stupid!? You're stupid! You're getting earrings and you haven't even pierced you (should be "your") ears yet!!!
Orrrrr~... I can remove the enchantments put on the two of you. (It's said as narration, while Scarle should be the one saying it.)
The city is it's (should be "its") own jungle. Now let's snap to it. (This is during the Rosechu scene)
You're like a little Lovelock(.)
Well, that's it for me! Good luck on whatever you're planning to do next, and congratulations for releasing such a content-full game! ^^